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I am

I am your Yin,
I am your Yang,
I am your sun and your moon.

I am your heart,
I am your mind,
I am your beginning and your end.

I am numb,
and still I feel.
I am blind,
but I see it all.

I am your friend,
I am your foe,
I am your war and your peace.

I am your flesh,
I am your blood,
I am your poison and your cure.

I am numb,
and still I feel.
I am blind,
but I see it all.

You are my one,
You are my only,
You are my love,
You are my pain.
You are my joy,
You are my torment,
You are my sunshine,
You are my rain.

I am your truth,
I am you lies,
I am your terror and your comfort.

I am your torch,
I am your shadow,
I am your song and your silence.

I am numb,
and still I feel.
I am blind,
but I see it all.

I am numb,
and still I feel.
I am blind,
but I see it all.

I am.

I am.

Author notes

This is meant to be read as lyrics, so the repetition would be hidden more by verse chorus and melody. The "you are" section is my middle eight, probably preceded and followed by a short instrumental. But I'm going too much into the music I haven't written yet, so I will stop there...

It's personal as to how I feel right now, and it may be a bit confusing but I guess that describes my emotional state as well as can be right now.

The last two lines by the way are to be read as a quiet fading out to the music.

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  • what went wrong
    December 10, 2007

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    Great

    Ok firstly, I think this is possibly the most well written poem... well... song, in the contest so far. And secondly it didn't confuse me at all.
    To me this poem was about someone being everything to you and you being their everything.. but also about the ups and downs that you have when you are that close to someone. I liked it all but I really like the chorus. Like.. sometimes you can see and feel things.. but you don't want to or you are putting those feelings aside.. but you still know that deep down they are there. Well it made sense to me!
    Thanks alot for entering this into the contest and good luck!

  • machine
    December 9, 2007
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    Good lyrics

    I was kind of confused at firs until I read your note. I think it is damn good.