Sunny and mild weather for a walk through the woods;
jubilant cotton puffs in the blue sky,
green clouds laden with cones top slash pines
Violet beautyberries, saw palmetto leaves
swamp bay and ironweed, landscape this community,
home to the squirrel treefrog.
I share this time with barely another creature to be seen,
though occasional droppings tell me that some have been near;
nocturnal, I'm hoping, as my wonderment holds a touch of fear.
Exiting the woods, I follow a prairie trail
where orange sulfur butterflies
sail over a carpet of lavender stars.
There I meet two walkers who
are as thrilled as I to have
spied the giant gopher tortoise
No others appear besides
in this perfect place of worship;
a congregation of white peacock butterflies
quietly recite the service.
A contest entry
- Nature ~ A Beautiful View by Demington.
850 points, ended January 15, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Natural World: In Honor of AsIThink by hawkeslake.
1050 points, ended January 3, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I thoroughly enjoyed this delightful ramble with you through the woods. A fresh and wonderful experience.
Good one,
Bill
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Thank you, Bill. This poem is also published on the site, www.naturewriting.com
You might enjoy that site. (I have a few other poems listed there which I wrote a few years ago; probably not my best, lol.)
Happy New Year
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Colorful and lovely images of your walk through the woods, with both reverence and a bit of wholesome fear. Thank you for entering.
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A very interesting read
Your style is somewhat random and a bit hectic. This can be distracting in some situations, but I believe that you pulled it off very well. I really like the way you used a drastically different vocabulary than what I've seen so far. Well done. Edit this and really work it over and you might be surprised at how far you could take this.
Blessings,
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Thank you very much for the trophy and for your comments.
When you say drastically different vocabulary, are you referring to the names of the plants and butterflies?
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THIS IS DELIGHTFUL. PERFECT THE WAY YOU BRING YOUR WORDS TO LIFE AND LOVE FOR NATURE IS WONDERFUL. AGAIN YOU HAVE A BEAUTFUL GIFTED EYE. GOD BLESS
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Your encouragement means a lot to me.
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I love all the imagery and nature in this poem, feel like I am there when I'm reading it and that is the kind of poem I enjoy. Thank you for entering.
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Wonderful poem, It was a real pleasure to read. The setting of this sounds so perfect. Keep up the great work.
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stunning... only one line i would change and ull prolly hate me for this... but istead of cones slash pines id change it to 'top slash cones pines' a congregation of white peacock butterflies... beautiful line there... only wish i had thought of that one first lol. beautiful and keep it up and ill keep reading,
hope u dont mind my critisism on that line and others would prolly disagree with me but i just thought that would make it.
take care and blessed be,
georgie,
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slash pine is the name of a tree
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AWESOME
This is awesome and inspirational sts......stay the same!!**##1 *BYE* -
Oh, this is amazing! Such beautiful diction and flow, truly masterful!
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I love to write about nature.
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Oh I like this it is really a nice piece thank you for sharing this with me you ahve such a talent with this best wishes and much love
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Thank you; but seriously, do you find any awkward spots? I'm thinking of sending this somewhere.
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Oh, you can smell all the smells and see all the colours...very nice. ^_^
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Oh, you should've seen that big turtle
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Wonderful
The beauties of Nature in all their glamour and glory not only please our senses but also send a spiritual message to our soul giving it peace and tranquility which we need so much. The poem is a spontaneous expression of that theme and after reading it I could feel the inspiration that went into its making.
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Thank you very much.
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