Sitting here wishing
I could just float away
No one looking to see
The hurt I endure day by day
With each bad memory
I tend to close up more
I am more sealed up
Than the day before
With each passing moment
I lose sight of the real me
And instead of a closed book
I am now a locked diary
Locking in my thoughts
Locking in my dreams
Hurting me more than
I'll ever let be seen
Locked tight
Is the lid on my tears
And maybe again it shall open
But not for many years...
By: SLD July 29,2003
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Written July 29th, 2003
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deep and emotional like all the other ones you write..great write..i really like the rythm and flow of the words of all your poems..keep it up..
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Now this is my kind of poem. I LOVE it when the poet exposes something about herself and when the poem is obviously written for the poet not the reader. It's like the poet is allowing me to peek into her journal and see just one section of an entry, just enough to share one small bit of herself with me. Anyway, thank you for shoaring this- it is my favorite thus far.
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awww...that was a terrific write!~ Sad but beautifully
written
...I love it. You did a great job!
Love how you did the diary and such...really great. It's
a different approach. God Bless you!
~sweetgurl -
Holy crap. This poem actually made me cry. It touched me because I have felt the same way for my entire life and never have been able to put it into words. This is FANTASTIC! Keep up the amazing work! I love it! Good job again!!!! ~~ashley
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humm...beautiful. Your not alone with the lostness, pain, and confusion. many other company your pain. Great write. That diary will one day unlock and you shall find yourself once again, and become the person you want to be. someday....that's all anyone can promise. hollow yet a glint of hope yet still shines within them. hold on.
if not i've got ya 
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I said it!You just have a way of moulding words:'And instead of a closed book/I am now a locked diary...'A book we would open soon but a diary is locked up in the closet and probably forgotten also- the last stanza sums up this fact.A sad poem but great art.
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That is so sad. No one should have to bottle up their emotions. Then things just go down hill. Trust me. Great poem.
TroubledAngel -
DAMN! This one is very honest, and I can relate. Keep it up!!!!!!!!
~KaTeLyNn~ -
hey sis that was worded perfectly, it was very strong and powerful....keep up the good writing and thanx for the comment.
Your Bro, Jarrod -
I like the way you can simplify feels such as "And instead of a closed book I am now a locked diary", these are my most common feels. ~joker~
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love it
wow...your really good i really see what you meanlike i can see it, hope you understood that -
Excellent!
Delightful! Wonderful write! Belinda -
wow great poem! With each passing moment
I lose sight of the real me
And instead of a closed book
I am now a locked diary
I can relate..great poem!
sPaZ~* -
THIS IS WHAT I'M FEELING! Gurl this was amazing, and it was like looking into a mirror and seeing myself. Especially these lines:
"With each bad memory
I tend to close up more
I am more sealed up
Than the day before
With each passing moment
I lose sight of the real me
And instead of a closed book
I am now a locked diary"
Gurl thanx for everything you have done for me by listening to me and eveyrthing in the past couple of weeks. It helped so much. And this poem was beautiful, I loved all the emotion, and you know its truly wonderful when it can relate to a reader as well..keep up the great work!
Love Always, ~Jemm -
Oh...I was already down, now it got worse LOL/
No, seriously, great poem you wrote!
Deep feelings, and very open thoughts.
I liked it so very much!
Take care,
Mari -
This was a wonderfully expressed poem...the feelings come pouring from the screen and crashing into my feelings. Which in a sense miggle with each other because they hold some what of the same feeling. wonderful write you have here and for allowing me to feel this poem as if were my own thank you. Also Thank you so much for the gracious comment on my poem "The Weeping Mirror" I am always warmed up by such a wonderful comment. Thank you a ton.
Night's Melodic Breeze.
Lidi
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once again you wrote a great poem. knowing what i know about living in a world when i didn't talk - the poem reminds me of days long ago. now - oh boy do i talk. i bet that some i know wish i was at least a closed book if not a locked diary.
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i know this feeling
all too well
closed book to locked diary
to me, those lines were especially powerful
i look forward to reading more of your work
bookmarking this one
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wow i loved this poem, very descriptive and expressive, and has a nice flow. i can relate to this one, as can im sure many others, lovely write
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this makes me mad. sorry. (no, you didn't write it badly, it just has some meaning for me, so that actually is a GOOD thing right??)
woops, i gotta do the laundry, cyl. -
i give it a 10
wonderfully written hun, i felt so sad reading this, every stanza you wrote perfectly in my opinon, and the flow was flawless. i loved every stanza but this is my fav.:
With each passing moment
I lose sight of the real me
And instead of a closed book
I am now a locked diary
thats quite a powerful stanza i think. i thank you for writing and posting this, i really enjoyed reading it.
also i wanted to tell you thank you for your comment on my poem last words, im very glad that you liked it, and i thought that paticular line was good to. if your wondering why i said an up side down rose, because some people might not know. and up side down rose represents an ending of love tragically. iv only heard of it once, that is how i found out about it, a man's girlfriend had left him, and he hung and upside down rose on his ceiling and then hung himself, because he rather would die then live without his love.
i have been wanting to write a poem about an upside down rose, and i was thinking about it one nite, and that is how last words was wrote. anyways, sorry for rambling. thank you again. ~Julzzz~
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Sitting here wishing
I could just float away
No one looking to see
The hurt I endure day by day
With each bad memory
I tend to close up more
I am more sealed up
Than the day before
Lines touched right to the soul, cause i wish that people knew thats how i felt on a day to day bases..but it'll always escape them...well anyways thanks for the comments.
thanks for sharing this sad, yet great piece
One Love, One Voice, One Pen
Blessed Little One -
I loved the part where you were talking about insteada of a closed book your a locked diary..that sounded so so cool.
And in the ending when you said the lid is on your tears..that is just awesome. Great originality through this peice, it sounded really nice!!
~*~blessings~*~
~rora -
Excellent descriptions of feelings here - I truely loved this write. Good metaphors as well that help to capture the real emotions of this poem - great job
Much love to you
~*blue*~
xxx xxx
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I loved this. Very well expressed.n you worded things excellently in this. I love so many lines but i would have to say my favourites were :
"And instead of a closed book
I am now a locked diary"
Good way to describe the feeling. I'm sure most of us go through this at one time or anything. Awesoem write. Keep it up!
*~ILISSA~*
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