Sat in the shallow lagoon,
hidden deep in tranquil woodland.
One of the last natural places,
completely untouched by man.
The nightly musical symphony,
gives me a glimpse of this earth.
From time to time I even think,
that it could be of actual worth.
But I am not to be fooled or tricked,
far away from prying eyes.
Formally known as the bringer of death,
I hide in my fine disguise.
Waiting patiently, biding my time,
for the moon to rise on macabre night.
Then I will discard this smokescreen,
and take this pit filled world by might.
The rivers will run blood red,
all will be slaughtered by my hoards.
Lead my minions into unholy war,
and become the earths new overlord.
Author notes
Picture 3 with the title Macabre Nights. Finally...hehe
A contest entry
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900 points, ended December 22, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Ooh!!! I really love this!! you did such a wonderful job!!! It got Gold once! It should have gotten Gold again!!lol.. I really enjoyed reading this.. Unique yet sweet!!
Angel
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nice, but could've been strung together as a couple of paragraphs if you take out the spaces in between lines. i liked it
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Very deep and dark and intense the lines you have penned here - liked the flow rhythm rhyme and message you share with readers in these lines. Neat presentation as well.
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such a good poem, so deep so raw. The imagery is immense. very well written. thank you so so much for entering, the very best of luck to you and well done on the gold in your previously entered contest. keep up the good penning. xXx
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Morbid & Haunting
This poem is dripping with excellent descriptions.
'Formally known as the bringer of death,
I hide in my fine disguise.' My favorite line. Who knows what death could look like? Making it yourself seems to make it less feared. Excellent!
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This background is awesome Macabre Nights. A perfect fit.
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Brilliant
I love this. This is wonderful dark writing at it's best. Brilliant flow and and imagery again. Keep it up you are good.
Wayne Leon
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Good muse here
Loved the way you were so cleverlu disquised until the moon rising to take all
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Awesome! This is my kind of writing!
A wonderful, powerful and dark write. The rhyming scheme is wonderful...and the 'mask' to blend in...
Excellant writing Lady..you don't need my imagination..your own is amazing!
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I like the rhyme and the twist of you being in disguise. It started out from a different viewpoint and I thought I had to be afraid for you ... nice job. thanks for sharing with the group.
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I love the little twist
"fine disguise"
You have such an awesome
imagination!
Great Write!
~Pastel
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wow this is really good
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Great Write Dear, it's Dark yet in someways it's not Excellent Write
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I absoutely love this. "and become the earths new overload" Simply masterful.
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