my angry scream in silence
my boisterous curse
my jawning behind my hand in the dark
my wide laugh at others' stupidity
my sincere apologies to my pets cat when i accidently burp
my sexy thoughts
my nastiness
my shame
who said people should not live alone
one person can built a uni-world so easily
A contest entry
- The Next Big Thing by Nicole Hanna.
18000 points, ended December 20, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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lol...short, but so true. We can be our own 'one person band' in life.
I liked this. Full of depth and emotion - and truth.
good luck in your contest.
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Wait, is your pet your cat, or does your pet have a cat? You said "my pets cat". lol. I was a little confused there. Was "jawning" supposed to be "yawning"? With a piece so short, it's more important than ever to pay attention to typos. You have less chance to impress with fewer lines. In the last line "built" should be "build". Loved the "uni-world" image. Thanks for entering.
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a uni-world...
Wonderfully well expressed! Good luck in the contest!
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tnx
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yes you are an island... do you have pineaples i can come and pluck,,,, good luck xx
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