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Last hopes

I skipped through the streets calling death,
He held my hand and took my breath,
I'm so lucky my life's so fucked up,
But thats the way that it goes,
My life taken, a lethal overdoes,
Death becoming my only friend,
Only friend.

 

Seems like death is my present this year,

My last hopes all rushing home,

For every-night it is death that I fear,

My last hopes rushing home. 

 

It's time to play his favorite game,
It's called death, am I insane,
I'm so lucky my life's so fucked up,
But thats the way that it goes,
My soul taken, onto hell it goes,
Death becoming my only friend,
Only friend.

 

Seems like death is my present this year,

My last hopes all rushing home,

For every-night it is death that I fear,

My last hopes rushing home.


I'm starting to feel so ice-cold,
Lights fading as to death they are sold,
I'm so lucky my life's so fucked up,
But thats the way that it goes,
My life's over, paranoia dispose,
Death becoming my only friend,
Only friend.

 

Seems like death is my present this year,

My last hopes all rushing home,

For every-night it is death that I fear,

My last hopes rushing home.

 

My last hopes,

My last hopes,

My last hopes all rushing home. 

 

Seems like death is my present this year,

My last hopes all rushing home,

For every-night it is death that I fear,

My last hopes rushing home.

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  • Hinata
    August 6, 2008
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    this is super great!


  • TheComaKid
    June 16, 2008

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    omg...thats so good.

    i love the repetition of

    I'm so lucky my life's so fucked up,
    But thats the way that it goes,

    this poem is amazing..almost lyrical

    the last verse
    took my breath away

    Seems like death is my present this year,

    My last hopes all rushing home,

    For every-night it is death that I fear,

    My last hopes rushing home.



    wow is all i can say and well done

    TheComaKid_X


  • Snap.Crackle.Pop
    April 27, 2008

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    amazing

    this poem is really well written! omg! this is soo good! thank you for writing it


  • gangster91
    February 25, 2008
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    Wow that was great. I liked how you used feeling. I enjoyed it.


  • Julia123
    January 21, 2008
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    i really liked it


  • XxTearsHaveFallenxX
    January 11, 2008
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    woow

    this was sad but beautiful good job on this poem.


  • Blissfullhatred silver member
    December 28, 2007
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    Nice

    Excellent!! It doesnt song like a song to me but more of a story.


  • MiSs ImPeRfEcTiOn
    December 20, 2007
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    god i told u i wanted u
    so emotional
    love it


  • ShinyBUBBLESxo
    December 16, 2007

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    You have a very lyrical style. It makes your poetry flow together very well. I really enjoyed this poem. The emotion that you put into it was deep! The imagery was also wonderful. Keep up the great work. I'm looking forwad to reading more of your poetry.


  • PinUpLovesGreaser
    December 14, 2007
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    you should realy be a song writer... are you in a band?


  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    December 14, 2007
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    Yes,I can picture it being some sort of a song....great piece...


  • Nemo Forevermore
    December 11, 2007

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    wow i really like this one, i couldn't help singing it...yes i created a melody and started to sing it. it's great. i love how such a dark subject can have lighter moments, like skipping through the streets and playing games, because it's light but twisted at the same time. great work! again wonderful imagery!


  • NeverSayAddiction
    December 9, 2007
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    hmmm...

    i couldnt read it all...itsreally full of emotion..very nicely done...


  • Times Change
    December 9, 2007
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    wow dave thats really really deep

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