A mind loves to create
manifests one which outpaces
when it encounters resistance
mind knows to get it around
a lever it invents
lift the weights
many a times more weighty
than one alone can handle
when it cannot count fast
mind invents computer
it computes so fast
the mind itself bewilder
when one cannot fly
it invented aeroplane
to lift away from ground
fly fast continents
marvelous mind imagine
make things happen
it can send a man to moon
dive deep into unknown depths
it runs after perceived joys
only to find it mixed
fantasies many things
seek many refuses
only to leave dishearten
a mind in perpetual action
never rests for a while
mind not enclosed by boundaries
always break limitations
through time and space
the triumphs of mind are many
so also its failures
when a mind set in pace
split the atoms
create light in darkness
sought comforts combating nature
coolness in summer
warmness in winter
it has achieved its fond desires
the effects of emissions
ran so fast and so far
mind is not able to curb
the very things it create
looking to endanger
the very existence
of creator (mind) it overtook
Author notes
A mind fell behind the machines of its creation
A contest entry
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Comments
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Not sure why you chose to cap the first word, but nothing else in the poem. And phrases like "many a time" always throw me, because it seems like extra words are just thrown in there for good measure. Why not just "many times"? Anyway, it's an intriguing subject that had me questioning things on a personal level. Thanks for entering.
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Wow. A good write with an amazing metaphor. I like the way you expressed it to. well done and good luck
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