be my parrot
say what I want you to
be pretty when I want you to
be cute at my command
be sociable when I need you to be
be everything when I need that
and then when I have better things to do
receive your seed
and piss off
Author notes
don't really like parrots
A contest entry
- No place to put it..... by Menace.
2250 points, ended December 11, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hmmm.,yes
It does seem that this might have come from the handbook most men read about on "how to be a man". I don't know if this is personal for you, or an observation. I hope it is an observation.
From a stanpoint of reading like the thoughts of a man, great. Men are much less verbal than woman, so it does mimic the thought process. It has no lines that you did not need. Each line has its purpose in the piece.
Nice job,
bob (hitthispuppy)
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Well I don't either...now. haha
I disagree with this not having a place. There is a contest up right now for pieces of noncomformity, rebellion, anti-government, etc. and I think this fits perfectly (just my opinion of course).
I completely dig the moral, but this is a little simple for me. I want to see you draw the emotion out.
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