dancing around
with dewy- innocence
we felt the warmth
of winter
drinking a hot cup of cocoa
we talked about memories
way down the road
and reminised the times
we made fun of each other
and felt so embarassed!
smiling to each other,
we cannot help
but start to laugh
you put your arms around me
and we watch the snow outside
falling crisply
Author notes
transit~
A contest entry
- ~*Rounds Contest*~ by TwilightDazzles.
500 points, ended December 14, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 3 Rounds Contest by Crazy9Piano8Freak.
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beautiful! no extra words getting in the way of the experience....clear...pure...
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Your poem conjures up wonderful memories.
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Another poem that displays great imagery
the alliteration I noticed here and there is a nice touch of detail!
Leander -
Lovely and reminiscent. Thanks for sharing
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Nice write... good luck and thanks for entering
Koko
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Wow
The first and last Stanza really made me feel warm and cozy inside great write!
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The first stanza of this poem sets the mood for the rest of it... cozy, warm, innocent youth with the first little sprigs of potential romance springing from friendship. This is an awesome piece, one which brings a lot of little memories to this old lady who is far from those first days of blossoming romance.
Some things we never really forget... thank goodness
A really lovely poem
Congratulations on the much deserved Gold trophy
Dee
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The first and last stanzas are beautiful. People always talk about summer love, but I winter love is even better. Even just winter friendship. The cold gives you a reason to hold on and need each other.
"dancing around
with dewy- innocence
we felt the warmth
of winter"
Definitely my favorite. Especially, "with dewey- innocence." So beautiful. -
Congrats on the gold trophy, this is really good
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Aww... this is so warm n sweet... perfect for winter~ unfortunately, here in BKK it's no where near snowing... lol
Nothing like a good (special?) friend ^^
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awesome
this was a very sweet and gentle poem! now that its the christmas season... it's all about joy and snow isn't it? I love it!
It's just so unfortunate that we're situated in this location... no snow! we can't enjoy the beauty... sad
best of luck in the contest!
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WOW
Lovely poem, appu.
Best of luck in the contest!
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Aww I like this a lot it is really sweet. The imagery is great, I love the first stanza "the warmth of winter" Excellent job!! Best wishes in the contest and thanks for entering!!!
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