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Fifty? Yay!

Whenever, Love, I think of you,
I feel a twirl of soul, a summersault of kind,
a giggle true.
I know you will correct each line
I wrought without the perfect chime:
it makes me trust a hand so keen
will wipe out errors not foreseen
in haste by absent mind.

You make me want to err again!

So this now is my wish to you:
May days of sunshine, nights of blue,
swirl you to cosmic rendezvous.
And clustered in colloquium
may angels, mortals and Supreme
gift you with inspiration's hue.
A golden crown now inbetween
the young, the old, and neoprene:

Happy fiftieth year of been, Beloved M, our rhyming Queen!

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For MargaretG, on her fiftieth birthday, December 11, 2007. Thank you, Margaret, for being my kind, trusted and very compassionate friend. I love you so much!

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  • Lyndon gold member
    December 17, 2007

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    Happy and full of lovingkindness

    Myra, your poem is rich in fellowship, humour and tribute.
    "neoprene" is a chemical resistant to heat, weather, oil, etc.[I once, almost 50 years ago, taught Organic Chemistry] I am not sure of its use here.
    Apart from this word, I really enjoyed this poem.
    Ron.


    • myrataal silver member
      December 17, 2007
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      Ah Ron, but don't you see: it is those who are neither old nor young, but allweather people! And: it is a neologism and a myraism.

      Thanks for the HM.

  • Vera Rich
    December 16, 2007

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    A sincere tribute, and in general well-wrought. I am not sure though about "neoprene" -it seems a little "off-key" to me.


  • Ellis gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    Excellent Writing

    This makes me want to know Ms. G
    You say she rhymes; that is a treat
    I don't know Lyndon well either
    I'll go to him when I leave her!
    ------


  • Jalalbad gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    I have to agree, a light writing a poem of love. Heartwarming. It is great to know you are loved such.
    I wish you luck in the contest.


  • waydownuponjoy
    December 12, 2007

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    A light ...

    shone through this labor of love and poem for Margaret G. It was light with humor and long on truth and a pleasure for me to read. Sweet sharing of positive thoughts and wishes for her special ways! joy


  • Lukey
    December 11, 2007

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    Astounding

    You always manage to capture the essence of whatever you're writing about. Your words are a boquet. Being fifty really is a celebration.


  • neurosine gold member
    December 10, 2007
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    When you really apply yourself it's amazing and profound. Well written and perfect.


  • Mystical-Gardenia
    December 9, 2007

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    Brava!!

    Well done poet!! Your words chime true the joy you bring to share is a part of your aura and you have brought the sunshine of your soul to our dear friend Margaret ever so eloquently


  • PerVirtuous
    December 9, 2007
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    Ha ha ha... beautiful, as always.


  • MargaretG
    December 9, 2007

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    Yay! Friendship!

    Dear Myra, thank you for these beautiful and kind wishes! The angels truly are clustered around me giving encouragement, and you are one of their clearer voices. We are on the same road with the same destination.
    I love your grin in the middle!


  • DevonJM
    December 9, 2007

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    Excellent :)

    If there is one thing that can stand the test of correction, it is that of true friendship and personal relationships. For they are the same things that fuel the love of caring to share with another who we are, and to help each other be all that we can be. Well said Myra, and God bless you on your day of birth Margaret.

    Excellent write, and happy birthday Margaret!


    • MargaretG
      December 9, 2007
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      Thank you Devon, for good wishes!
      I agree, true friends can withstand each other's humanity.

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