Cork popped bubbled dreams
as noise makers signal
ball's drop --
chapter ends;
new resolution
is etched
upon a page turned.
Author notes
Prompt contest: January Rain
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Prompt Contest by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended December 9, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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That is a very beautiful line you have started this poem with
the poem on it's whole is a masterpiece
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This was lovely flat lvoely So much with so little
I love that first line Cork poped bubbled dreams
that felt good to speak Well done.
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so they are
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I love those lil clappy dudes
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Most excellent write, Bel
I pray that 2008 will be a wonderful year for you and that all your dreams come true
Congrats on the silver!
Hugs,
Sandy -
Pop a top again for a new year to begin...old pages turn and new ones soon to enter in...I am thrilled this won a trophy for it is wonderful!...Thank you kind soul for sharing with me
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Bel, every time I read a piece of yours, I learn a little more about what metaphor is - you always write with excellent metaphor, very well written and succinct,
"new resolution
is etched
upon a page turned."
So sad and such a powerful ending..congrats on the silver
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Marvelous! Love how you managed to stay completely away from cliche acronyms and metaphors. The "bubbled dreams" is wonderful! A fresh and unique metaphor like only you can do! Love it!! I have missed so much of your writings as of late, and am so enjoying this one!
"....upon a page turned...." May the book of your life start a new and carefree chapter, my dear friend. No one deserves it more than you. Love you muchly, dear one!! 
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Love the metaphor and very creative take on the prompt...January is a time of change...out with the old and in with the new.
Smooth flow and imagery.
Thank you for entering! -
It is that time once again. I know that 2008 will hold many treasures that you so deserve my dear. Pop the cork and allow the flow of recompense for all that you've freely given in '07. You've been my blessing wrapped up into a great gift. As the page turns so will your life, for the greater good. Excellent take on the prompt. Good to see your muse so bubbly. The best to you in the challenge dear heart.
Always ♥
Mom
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excellent take on the prompt! love the flow and what you did with the prompt ~best to you in the contest~ Trisha
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