Cast your eyes upon the nights sky
Cast your soul upon the seven oceans
When time and space creates a distance
Feel the essence of naive universe
So at times of loneliness & despair
Cast your eyes upon the nights sky
In every star,I'll hold your dreams
as our faith remains in the moons orb
At times of endless sorrow & pain
Cast your soul upon the seven oceans
In every wave,I'll hold your spirit
as our hopes dives in depths of water
When time and space creates a distance
Feel the essence of naive universe
Look I'm not apart from you my dear
Author notes
The poems title Decembered stands for Remembered.The poem is written on December so I choose it.Its about missing someone and yet loving someone in a distance.
A contest entry
- Invite Only 6 by Laura Lamarca.
700 points, ended December 14, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really, really do like this one. I apoligise for wording my appreciation in the same way every time. lol.
One of the reasons I like it so much is that you deal with such massive things as oceans and stars. I can never and probably will never be able to do this. I can only zoom in on specific people or objects or very specific ideas- abstract ideas quite often. Therefore I will always be impressed by this kind of subject matter.
I like the way in which this is reassuring, but not from the voice of one person. Instead it's from an anonymous, faceless narrator, which is more interesting and sorta more organic and freeform.
Nice write!
Id X
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Seemes like these days we are having same feelings inside
we are writing something similer
anyway this is a very good poem on a very cool plot -
Beautiful poem, I think you did a great job and I love the title.
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i really liked your tittle and last para..
for some reason i feel like forcing yourself to write or to remove a writers block.. some thin is missing in this write.. i m not getting exactly what.. i likes some words u used like "navie" & "When time and space creates a distance" beside that i feel everything els is dull.. may be im not in a romantic mood now or i need cofee.. mom forced me to drink milk(blech) may be its that
anyways best of luck my friend
regards
abuyi
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whats actually missing can you point out abuyi so that I can correct.Its for a contest actually.And its the only thing I can write for the moment.
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nothni is wrong my friend..
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oh okies I agree that I'm on a bad writers block these days.Blame the coming exams.
tc thanks for the comment
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