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Bound by Gravity (Haiku)

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bound by gravity

ice sheets of prismatic blue-

glacier underfoot

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  • Bruce silver member
    June 6

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    I love the phrase "prismatic blue". I can tell you've seen glaciers; no who has can forget the eerie color of the ice. Well done!


    • Knight70 silver member
      June 6
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      Thank you so much for the comments on this one.

      They're incredibly beautiful sights, that's for sure.

      Don

      • Bruce silver member
        June 6
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        I'd love to cruise glacier bay. Everyone who does that says it's amazing. The only one I've seen is Portage Glacier near Anchorage.

        Bruce


        • Knight70 silver member
          June 6
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          I've never actually been to Alaska, but would love to visit there.

          I had to rely on a couple of different glacier photos to write this one. I watched a special on them not too long ago. I just love the sea, so Glacier Bay would be a real treat for me.

          Don

  • a good piece - cold but warm at the same time, the colour melts as readers throw looks of admiration.

  • bound by gravity-- awesome and beautiful line for such a picture!!!

    I LOVE IT...good take on the prompt xx


  • PinkPony
    May 6

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    Wonderfully said... a most satisfying and admirable haiku that made me glad I came to visit you, good Poet Sir. I do especially like the glacier line and how clever that is.


  • Lyndon gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    Icy

    and poetically put. I prefer not to have glacier underfoot.
    I do thasnk you for this fine, and brief poem.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • Melodies
    February 26, 2008

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    OOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooo!!! UUUUUmmmmmmm!!!! WOW! I'm glad to see this picture and not actually be there. A fine presentation, truly... haiku worthy of a hug and I thank you very much for the wonderful imagery thrill.


  • Sachiro k-Saruto
    February 20, 2008
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    wow

    this is a very good haiku!!! i'm jealous now, i wish that i could write haikus this good. i love the way that you used a picture to tell the story. glaciers are beautiful things....they make great haiku subjects. this piece gives me a sense of peace and tranquility, a sudden urge to take a nap (lol)


  • jcat gold member
    December 27, 2007

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    Gorgeous!!!! I could not view the picture either but I didn't need to the imagery was just superb!!! My own mind was able to conjure up a picture of lovliness based off your few words...


    • Knight70 silver member
      December 27, 2007
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      Thank you so much, Asdzaa.

      My gold membership ran out. I still have to get it renewed to at least silver to get the image back. For the next few months, I won't be on AP much, since my classes are getting really tough, but I'll be back when I can. I hope you had a great Christmas with your family, and will have an even better new year. Don


    • Knight70 silver member
      December 27, 2007
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      Thank you so much, jcat.

      My gold membership ran out. I don't even have a silver membership at the moment to get the image back on this poem. It's a gorgeous photo of a glacier. I've got to run, but I will return the favor later on tonight. Don


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    December 20, 2007

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    I couldn't view the photo..
    Lovely imagery..
    Beautiful Haiku..
    Peace and many blessings
    ~A~


  • Swan song gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    Excelllent imagary in this poem Very well done.

  • silverfish
    December 12, 2007

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    i like you're short pieces. i think writing good haiku's is very difficult, but your pieces read effortlessly, like walking through fresh air. thank you. got any more?


  • crystallynnbradford
    December 11, 2007

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    this is so good...i couldn't write a haiku to save my life...so envious...the pic was a nice touch too


    • Knight70 silver member
      December 11, 2007
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      Thank you so much, Crystal.

      Haiku takes so much practice, even though it's written in so few words. The biggest misconception that some have about haiku is that it has to be written in seventeen syllables, which is only true if it's written in Japanese. Japanese syllable counts are so different from other languages, which is why haiku written in foreign languages tend to be written in fewer words and syllables. I didn't learn that lesson until I'd written at least 50 haiku. I really love to write them now, much more than I did before, because I don't have to limit myself to 5-7-5. Some are 3,5,3, or 2,3,2, or whatever. It's all a matter of preference for the haiku poet. Haiku is still haiku, as long as it doesn't go past 5-7-5. I've done so much reading up on haiku over the past few months, so it's the one form that I can write well. I don't know any other forms yet, other than Tanka, but I'm in no hurry. I just write what interests me. Nature, especially the sea, really interests me, more than anything.

      I just finished a final, so my head is pounding. I'll be reading up on some of your work, now that I finally have the next few weeks off from school. Don


  • going nowhere
    December 10, 2007
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    you have such a knack for haiku. love the pic, too!


    • Knight70 silver member
      December 11, 2007
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      You are so kind.

      Thank you!! I do love to read and write haiku, that's for sure. I want to start learning some other forms. I was thinking about learning to write a Rondeau first. You and Pamela Lamppa teach me so much about form poetry. Don

  • deleteit
    December 10, 2007
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    You do give a portrait of beauty with these words! Fantastic haiku to say the least


  • Phoenix Karkadann
    December 10, 2007

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    Oooo! This is an excellent Haiku. I love how you paint the deeper image of the picture above with such few words!

    Well done!

    Phoenix


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    December 9, 2007
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    very nice haiku

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