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December Moon

Frost fading from the sky
takes its rest upon the weary ground.
Glistening in the frigid night.
Where he spies a beauty bound...

 


Bound in soul, inside the snow.
A melody in which we know
as a softly whispered lullaby.
A mist entrapped in Winter's sky.

And yet, through all that is,
and ever was or shall soon be.
Moon still hangs, an angels delight
Hovering twixt lush skies, warm seas.

Moon asked Sun to give her warmth
Of summer and the spring
Autumns lovely coloured dress,
one which made angels sing!

And for the coldest of the year,
Moon asked for crystal hue.
One to match her pearly sky
and loving eyes of blue

And in the ever changing blight
young Winter sent, in rosey white
diamonds made of her delight
A gift to one who brights the night

So as the crystals flurried
To the cold and weary ground
Moon had freed bold loving Earth
Young Angels newly bound

This Essence of our lives
that in the night hath dawned
has staid with us ever since

the Moon had made this bond.

Author notes

This poem was written in part to show the bond of 2 friends of mine who are engaged, and how they did it secretly, I'm probably going to write other poems depicting it better, but for now, this has what i was able to write. The man the Moon and the woman the Earth

A contest entry

hm...well, what do think really, an honest opinion of what you think of the poem and what you think it means.

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Comments

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  • I like this a lot, I love the nature aspect of it, and how it can actually be metaphorical for the love of your friends. Very nice. I loved these lines "And for the coldest of the year, Moon asked for crystal hue. One to match her pearly sky
    and loving eyes of blue" I am a huge fan of the moon (hence part of my name), and the sky, and the imagery in these lines is just so beautiful. I really liked this peice overall. You are really talented and I am enjoyed every read I have read so far. Great job poet. Another fantastick write.


  • Heroesrox
    February 19

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    Another loevly title with a great choice of words! You have a knack for imagery and that is friggin great! Thanks so much for this wonderful share, man!


  • Annalise
    December 23, 2007

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    My first opinion of this poem is it tries too hard. It's nicely written (aside from the obvious rhymes) and keeps a decent beat... until the reader attempts to find a deeper meaning in it. The surface "meaning" is enough...

    My Opinion? Your author notes makes a reader expect something more. Leave out the author's notes and leave the poem a nice "nature" poem.

    Thank you for entering.


  • foreverxnow
    December 9, 2007
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    grrrr! i hate how awesome you are!! jk but again, ANOTHER great poem. >.< i love the layeryishness of this one, and the rhyme. keep writing so i can keep being jealous!! 0.o

  • ecrivain01
    December 9, 2007

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    Not bad ...

    but you misspelled "stayed". However, that's a minor pecadillo. All in all, you've done a fairly good job with this. Your premise works and that's the main thing.


    • Fedrizzi
      December 9, 2007
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      ty for the comment and the typo i made lol, i had a bad day spelling i believe, the original line where "staid" was i used it as an adj. but i forgot to change it to a verb when i changed the line.

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