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You Broke My Heart

That day a year ago,
You ripped my heart into tiny pieces.
You have no idea how I felt
Because I gave my heart to you.

You took the key
And unlocked my heart,
But then you took it,
And shredded it!

How could you have done that?
How could you be so heartless?
How could you even think to do that?
Because now I'm broken-hearted.

Only a few pieces have been found.
And only you can find the rest.
You send my heart into a frenzy,
Every time I see you.

Soon enough,
My heart will be sewn,
But pieces will still be missing.
A lot of pieces...

My heart was broken,
That day a year ago.
You took it and shredded it,
But if you don't come back to me soon,
I'll just have to mend it myself...

Author notes

Again, this is for Daniel. A year ago on December 5th was when we "broke up". This is exactly how i felt. I still love him, and hopefully we can get back together when we're 16... But i really don't know if he still loves me or not. it's way too hard and way too complicated. I can't seem to move on and get over this one person... he really hurt me that day and even though i know it was the right thing to do, i want to move on but yet i don't and i can't. I hope this is what you wanted....

KokoluvsDaniel

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  • Lady Australis silver member
    May 23, 2008

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    this is really good
    but soeties the love never go back so you may have to tey and move on it if was ment to be then it will be


  • GypsyEyes
    April 3, 2008
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    sometimes people are just assholes who dont care who they hurt. you'll heal one day! lovely poem. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox

  • GypsyEyes
    March 27, 2008

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    "I'll just have to mend it myself..." isnt that the truth though! love that line! kinda made my day! good poem! thank you for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    He did this to me too, I'm so sorry you have to know how it feels to be broken in two, because it's so terrible. I thought he'd never do it to me, but he did... My ex and it's so hard to trust again.

  • trace3grls
    December 28, 2007
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    beautifully but sad write....


  • Beauty Of Silence
    December 25, 2007

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    ah!

    Classic! this is like a typical break up poem... but i definitely admire the depth in this poem... and just reading it feels so heart breaking! your emotions were too powerful! sad!

    You have expressed your thoughts pretty well... and this poem was like a story... inpressive! Altough, you haven't placed your option choice in your A.N!

    Thanks for the entry! appreciate it! And wshing you all the best of luck in my contest!

    Much love always,
    Ranji


  • fairytalelovestory
    December 23, 2007
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    loved this


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    December 13, 2007

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    This was an interesting piece. There is a lot of pain portrayed in your writing. Good job on winning an honourable trophy. Your thoughts came across very well.
    Thank you so much for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck.


  • Arizona Sunset
    December 9, 2007

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    I love the poem that you wrote here, Teen love can hurt like the blazes and sting for many years. Excellent emotional poem. thank you for your entry into my contest ~blessings always~


  • afroqban
    December 9, 2007
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    oh wow so very sad but well written


  • Angelic Princess21
    December 9, 2007
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    very nice write. best of luck in the contest

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