Flash them a sweet smile.
They'll never know how you're
dying inside.
Watch the sun set. The darkness rise.
Leaving the light behind.
Losing our minds.
Saying goodbye to sanity.
Hello, I'm here, ready
to bring you into
my deepest realms of
darkness and insanity.
These haunting words,
whispered in my ear.
You're haunting my dreams.
Controlling my world.
Your hate filled eyes
searching mine, looking for
some sign of weekness.
Let me tell you, honey,
you can't break me when
I'm already broken.
Author notes
This is kind of funny, I wrote this at my cousins birthday party. I was very bored. But it is dedicated towards someone.
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wow I love it, hits home very much. Such great emotion and imagary. Reminds me of me actually, good luck because your poem has in my books a good chance of winning, it's such a talented and so much in depth
thankx for sharing and take carex
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thanks everybody!
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Wow....really good...I'm impressed actually.
Great write, love the flow and rhythm of the poem
♥ Kass
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Ooh! this reminds me of some of my older work. Verry nice. Lovely, dark and haunting. I like it verry much.
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to be honest with you. this is a relly good write. i enjoyed it from beginning to end. thank you for sharing this with us.
Babygirl
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Wow
Hey-i'm a total fan of dark poetry here (though I have a lot of them that put in a little hope too) and I really enjoyed your poem. That's kind of me in a way...life looks different when you're broken.
Fav part: Flash them a sweet smile.
They'll never know how you're
dying inside.
LOVE IT
hearts and hugs
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Wow! that last line hits really hard. this is amazing work.
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This is a really great piece. The flow is good and the tone is perfect. Great job on this amazing poem.
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Good
Hi,my name is Celeste. I love poetry and i think you got something good going, as long as you keep your style and don't change it for no one.
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I like the tone of voice in this. Sarcastic rather but yet you can't stop reading? if that makes sense! It lives up to the title though!
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Thanks I was thinking about someone and got pissed off so here it is!
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