Faceless desires
lost in translation
a refugee from sanity
scanned weaknesses
of eyes wide shut
peeled down to an
essence that lacks
perfume. Stolen black
market love the ingénue
prepares for Act ll.
Author notes
Option 1
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
700 points, ended December 21, 2007, 6 entries
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wow!
this is incredible in it's brevity and how much is said perhaps in spite or perhaps because of that... this flows so naturally... there is certain phrasing that especially captures me, particularly the wording of lines 5, 9, and 10...
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Loved it...just a few corrections though; drop the 's'
in 'that' and, 'ingenue' should be 'ingénue.' That's all.
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thank you so much for the comment and suggestions. Do know that i admire you!
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Very deep and thought provoking, an excellent poem.
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thank you so much for the comment!
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You're welcome...
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