I am, who I am and I don’t know who else to be,
It’s not that complicated, I’m just me.
I’m laid back and take life as it comes,
I’ve also felt such pain it numbs.
We all leave pieces of ourselves behind,
To create an impact on mankind.
What can I do to make you see?
I really don’t care what you think of me.
This life goes through my hands like sand,
I’ve lost so much yet still I stand.
Stand to go on and see the next day,
To push the bad memories of my life away.
But I can’t do that, this I know,
Because you learn from each deadly blow.
You turn into the person you are today,
With each new obstacle that’s sent your way.
We creep on tip-toe day and night,
Waiting constantly for some impending fight.
Can’t we trust each other and finally love?
Become angels of mercy and rise above?
But what do you do when you’ve lost yourself?
When you’ve left all you are, on a dusty shelf?
Do you sit and surrender, hope for the best?
Or do you look for the good and forget the rest?
In this world you always have choices to make,
Choose wisely on which road you take.
You’re not alone; I’ve been there too,
Wracking you brain on what to do.
You’ll be alright in this crazy world,
There are people in your life that’ll lend a word.
Let them help, and let them in,
With strength in numbers you’ll always win.
Look for the light,
And renew your sight.
See the world in a different way,
And restore your endless night, into day.
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I love it! Especially the line "But what do you do when you've lost yourself?"
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You change tense from first to second, which is a problem.(I to you) Though what you express is very worthwhile, there is little if any imagery or metaphor to hold one's interest. You also seem to wander a bit from your initial stance, as if you are allowing the rhyme to guide what you say.
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I enjoyed this!
I found this to be an inspirational piece, much to learn from others, I agree "let them in" Great job!
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Great piece and good topic. Very best of luck to you in the contest
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A lot of wonderful advice.
Well penned....the last stanza seems to break the flow....a bit...IMHO...
Best wishes in the contest..
Write on!
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what is IMHO?
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means: in my humble opinion
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