Granny laid upon her lonely hospital bed
And even in her final hours a smile lit up her face
Holding my hand she said to the doctors
'you did all you could, but it's my time to go
I've lived a good life, I have no regrets
My only hope is that dying is like a musical
A lit up stage, singing my last song
An audience of my loved ones, there to see me take my final bow'
Tears leaked from my eyes, but all she did was smile
I uttered a final I love you, and her grip on my hand was gone
The doctors bowed their heads, shook my hand
Then left the room, leaving me behind
The world outside moved on, but the world inside that room stood still
I wiped my eyes, and a voice rose from the silence
So soft and vague, yet beautiful and strong
Maybe only in my mind, but I stopped to listen
Granny’s voice sang out, echoing on the walls
Of a room that I could not see, but I knew she was there
Singing her last song, her last, beautiful song
With all of her heart, to those that she loved
She held her last tune, and then she was done
I could almost see her bowing, and waving to them goodbye
And as vaguely as the song, I heard silent clapping
That only I could hear, the crowed was in an uproar
My heart soared, I felt as though I had been hugged
And whether it was all in my mind or not, I clapped along with them
Author notes
I wrote a poem for a contest that had to be only ten lines. I liked what I had written, and decided to write a longer version. You can go to my page and see the shorter version.
The prompt for that contest was silent claps. It reminded me of an episode of scrubs. In the episode A woman was about to die, and she said I imagin dying like a musical. And when she died J.D imagined her standing up from the bed and singing her last song.
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A contest entry
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THis was a sweet poem for your grandmother. I enjoyed reading it. Good tke from the episode of scrubs.
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Very Sad
I very much enjoyed the story, especially after finding out it wasn't a real story. You wrote it so well.
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There are a lot of punctuation problems in this piece. If you'd like, I could go through it line by line for you.
The idea of dying being a last song, a last performance is very appealing to me as a former actor. If you do a rewrite, try starting with the Granny's quote. Everything before that is told in that quote.
Jim -
This is beautiful although sad. I can relate to this very well as a few months ago I sat with my father as he passed. And I love the way you have told this.
Good luck in the contest.
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Very nice entry ~
I would like to thank you for entering the POW contest this week.....however, there are a few Rules which I need to point out ~
Entering Poems that are penned Specifically for the PO' contests....and copying from another one of your writes ~
I do hope you understand, but I can not score this entry.....as all Rules must be followed in order to receive a score from me and your other Judges ~
Please return next week and try again ~
I can see you have a tender heart....and one which paints beautiful words, so please come back and join us again,
Bear ~
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A beautiful write, best of luck to you
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Best wishes in the contest.
This is a very heartwarming poem.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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