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Mass Deception






Fishing for fame
with a net of disguises
deceiving the audience
while aiming for recognition.

A gathering of admirers
to watch a performance
of putrid pretense
so often posed
when playing perfection.

Insincere implications
insinuating the ignorance
of inacceptable
instigation.

The joke's on you, love.



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Inspiration: Picture Above
Word Count: 44.968759697
Real Word Count: 45 words.

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  • unmasked synergy
    June 7, 2008

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    your alliterative taste reigns free in this piece, the title gives an apt expectation of the poems content and the theme of deception is solid in the body of the work itsef, I think the third stanza could be rephrased though with a lessened tone to the literary device
    thank you for entering

    un

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 16, 2008
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    HaHA, this was great...


  • leander Moderators member
    January 26, 2008

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    I really like what you have written out of the picture here. You used some great imagery within the lines and I'm definately pleased with the alliteration you used - one of my pet peeves

    Thank you for entering the contest, I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    January 23, 2008

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    Great write, I love that picture. Congratulations on your prior gold trophy for this piece. Best of luck in the contest.


    whisper


  • Systems Malfunction
    January 9, 2008

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    Nicely written. It almost made me laugh from the subtle humor, yet it is a serious piece. Great job!


  • Dygurl
    December 12, 2007
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    love it! so very true of our society! Nicely written


  • W a s p
    December 10, 2007

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    Pure...

    theater, how you grab these words and put them together in this intellectual way always astounds me...ian.


  • Amera gold member
    December 9, 2007

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    I love this! You did a fantastic job with the prompt. Your vocabulary and vocalic alliteration is at master level. Very impressive!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • parachute fog
    December 9, 2007

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    the first stanza is the best as its not riddled with alliteration.
    Its a great write tho very economical, contained all that needed to be said within the 45 words.
    Every word meant something significant.


  • Death of the Author
    December 9, 2007

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    Well you know I love this...I think it's so perfect, the 50 word limit really helped I think...

    Your use of alliteration is pretty damn good, without being over the top OR making it make no sense lol.

    The final line is just so sarcastic and...brilliant. I think it fits the picture perfectly. This is one of your best free verse's in my opinion.

    Anyway, good luck and take care x


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    December 8, 2007
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    Brilliant!
    I just love those Ps & Is

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