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Todays Run

tangled misconstrued complex emotions
drip irregularly from sealed outlets
mindless sense filled pondering
erratic heart-beating drums
thoughts meander undrivenly nowhere
wet laces flip unevenly in radical rhythm
sun charged pavement welcomes repetitively
tattered weeping over worn shoes
stove--off ^ car--stopped ^ dog--bark
filter
f-i-l-t-e-r
pressed limits exceed breathing ability
delicious gripping afflictions
once forgotten spaces cloud and uncloud
over wrought and over wrung life
saturated muscles work vigorously

potential matter exerted

traumatized mutilated will concedes its assault

rubber soles cease movement

reality blurs involuntarily back in focus
bitter cold water bites roughly down

todays factuality comes into play

 

~RunDownAngel~
 ~~RLS~~

Author notes

Hope you like it and Understand it more than anything. I know you runners out there will

~Carlie

"The best pace is suicide pace, and todays a good day to die" ~Anynomous?

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  • BehindTheShadow
    March 10, 2008
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    I really like the imagery you used and thought that this was a great poem.


  • xPink-Lotusx
    March 9, 2008

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    This is Great!

    Being someone who has lost a great deal of weight through the process of exercising my brains out I fully understand and love this poem! Well done!


  • raggyann
    December 19, 2007
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    this was awsome sodescriptive
    i like this poem and its easy to see why you won gold
    congrats


    • BrokenAngel24
      December 23, 2007
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      thank you so much. I always love a good review. Yea I enjoyed the gold Much as the praise. I use the points to hold more contests.


  • Whispers of Hope
    December 19, 2007

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    simply amazing

    THis poem is so COOL!! I love the words you used to discribe what you feel when you run your whole form is awsome I really enjoyed reading this Good job Congradulations on Gold!!!!
    ~Ocean~


  • God is my reality
    December 19, 2007

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    OH MY GOSH, hands down, you won gold. This poem is amazing. I love all the thoughts. you're describing everything that goes on in a runners mind. I'm awe struck right now. This is so GOOOOOOOOOOOOD. I mean wow, I'm just amazed. The alliterations, the staccato sound, it's just wow. I love it so much. You HAVE TALENT. Wow...Oh my gosh this is so good. There is NOTHING LEFT TO FIX. You are truly amazing, and it is obvious that you are not a poser, whatsoever. This is true, honest to God emotions, and you did just wow. You captured everything, and I could not ask for a better poem. Congrats on the Gold, and it should be sent to you very soon. I'm still in shock of how amazing this poem is. It's just wow

    • BrokenAngel24
      December 21, 2007
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      Thank you so much as much as i love gold i love the praise more I am so glad you enjoyed it. Much appreciated is critizism as is praise.

      ~BrokenAngel~


  • Melissa Burns
    December 9, 2007

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    What a good poem - very good to read because it sends through that feeling of running, which would be hard. Very nice

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