Laying in bed
eyes closed in
sweet remembrance.
A familiar pain has
returned.
Yelling
Fighting
feeling of worthlessness
wanting disappearance.
The relief I once had
no longer with me.
Promises made
holding me back.
But memories are sweet.
The beautiful blade severing
the fragile shell that holds me together.
Tough on the outside
yet can be so easily penetrated.
Awww.....
A new pain consumes.
One I control.
A tiny smirk spreading to smile.
Blood swelling to the surface.
Can't let the feelings out
not allowed.
At least I can offer this freedom.
Oooohhh.....
Sweet memories.
Author notes
It is funny the things a mother can make you feel.
Op. 5 boydamaged
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really good piece. i really like it. =) great imagery, great emotion.
thanks for entering & good luc -
it's pretty good. i can imagine myself in this position because i have been so many times, only too precautious to pick up the blade.
-kassie
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This is a real heartfelt and painful piece... I almost feel as if it's my arm dripping with fresh blood...
I really enjoyed this poem... Keep up the good work
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wonderful write...Tough on the outside
yet can be so easily penetrated.
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The beautiful blade severing
the fragile shell that holds me together.
really liked that line ^^
Its a very sad poem and I hope you know your never alone, even when it all feels this horrible.
Keep the pen to the paper.
Oh and thanks for the comment on For Lauren
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Wow what a deeply dark and vivid piece. I most like the part about being so tough and strong on the outside but so easily penetrable to the inside...I never really thought of it that way, although for many it is so true.
Such a unique recognition, and you have expressed self mutilation with meaning and emotion behind it (as opposed to the graphic expressions that give it nothing to notice).
I really like this, it says alot.
♥
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I really love this....it has a nice natural flow to it and creates vivid images in my head. "A new pain consumes. One I control" ...this made me feel good for some reason....loved the title too!! Very relatable feelings and emotions...even if they are somewhat sad.
Great write!!
Wyattxxx
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