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We Swallow Our Youth

 
 
 
 
 
Some days, a morning rises
too fat and round- its greedy
sky so empty. It spills
to ground, a hairy edge
flush with hidden movement.
 
Through that undergrowth

of untrimmed hedges,

of thigh and chin, nerves

tangle  in skin as spiders

burrow. Down beneath dark

soil- not black in needing light,
just invisible, like silk
threads caught in a breeze.
Or a hurricane. In either
case, fragile.
 
The spinning laces clouds
together. In time the web,
so vast, it holds the sky
in place,
as youth is swallowed
and the past digested-

lips first, then tongue.
 
Finally, there is silence.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • Zayra Yves gold member
    December 17, 2007

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    This is the time of year for silence....something about it just rises as if it were not silent at all! That is the irony.

    Who is the poem dedicated to?

    Gorgeous and deep poem...but I would except only that from you.


  • Naridill
    December 10, 2007

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    Spiders are beautiful creatures. They hurt you, but who doesn't try at one stage.

    This piece is crafted with such calm, kind of reads itself to me.


  • Namita silver member
    December 10, 2007

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    sigh... this is just beautiful... I'm arachnophobic, but I think I won't be any more, once I finish reading your spider series. Bravo.

    ~Namita


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    December 10, 2007

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    That silence can truly be a gift some days. This reminds me of quieting the voices, maybe I'm wrong, but that's where it took me. I'll say this much, you make me a little less frightened of spiders with these




  • LadyUnique silver member
    December 8, 2007

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    my goodness. i need to close my gaping mouth here

    'a hairy edge', 'a morning rises too fat and round' and 'the past digested-lips first, then tongue' were my favorites.

    at first i felt overwhelmed, then restless and finally peaceful. that's a lot to go through when reading one poem

    thanks for the treat

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