Triangles intervene perplexing Chinese checkers
in the perfect tessellation of the artist
getting blocked by the sunshine
coming in at the closed center peak on the window,
losing the vitamin d need
but winning something new…
green growth of fun in the pretty brush.
I asked my mamma to write her poem;
you asked me to do mine
on the same computer
where complaining has to be learned
that someone's to be behind --
oriental pieces equalize
could've hopped across to a trophy.
Weaving lines swerve, traces of moving marbles
cutting down to a corner, a tie
not merging in further on each spacing placing …
right now everybody's happy with this picture
---------------------------------------------game.
Author notes
When I first clicked on this, I had the main idea yet wasn't sure about entering lol at the time. But, now I got triggered to do so!
Keep comments clean.
In a list
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now ? (Round 2) by just mercedes.
500 points, ended December 14, 2007, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is this an unexpected take on the picture?
Comments
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very interesting
Your expression of your view is not only interesting but very entertaining. I really enjoyed reading this. I love the word tessellation. it is the first time I ever saw it in a poem. thanx, I am glad you trophied.
conni -
It did well with the judge, & I'll send you my something of a serious laugh
SplishSplashPencil sharpened to a trophy
It was fun trying to join your perception. very good to see the glassy look with opaque garden brightness coming in competition with concentration under inside shine in first stanza. where a gleeful logic might tick tock the shadow of other though "losing the vitamin d need" of putting things in place...
The middle verses revealed for me a modern example of our getting carried away with our turns of an inspiration as schemes. when interactive play gets piled like while shared desk could resemble a table for rules and lax feelings closing in on :
"oriental pieces equalize
could've hopped across to a trophy" yet it's balanced by daily clearing a little lol.
the final had a melding of keyboard and initial illuminated thrill along with daydream so to speak of finding time for "traces of moving marbles
cutting down to a corner" even for simple happiness of getting pebble from under shrub leaves before back to road what it's about.
I liked sitting with it but know I shouldn't be so long ha-ha,
also called
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this is an unexpected take on the picture, which I made to represent vegetal growth. You got that anyway, with the /green growth of fun in the pretty bush/ but then went on to play with it, which I liked very much.
Particularly liked /spacing placing/ and I've always loved Chinese Checkers, too. Well done.
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