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Russian Dolls

 
 
 
 
 
A Russian doll wears her masks
layered. Honesty reveals a deeper face,
but rarely the deepest.
 
People do not differ in this,
especially those left shuffling more
surface than most.
 
It is mistaken for shame when eyes
hook to our shallow end
and miss sleight-of-hand movement
under rib.
 
We all have an edge that fears light-
where we focus fortitude,
that daily work holding phantoms
and echoes in place.
 
Trust is easy to give but harder
to accept when given.
 
But that is only the skin-deep truth.
 
Further in, there is a quiet
realm, where surrender beckons-

the ultimate shape of trust.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • Swan song gold member
    December 31, 2007
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    This is an excellent write and could have been gold in my book in this contest. Well done


  • Elora Danon gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    Those walls we build around ourselves are deep and high. There aren't many that are able to traverse them and find that "quiet realm".

    Exceptional writing. I am honored to find this here.

    e~


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    December 28, 2007

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    Trust lies further in some than others, and I love the use of the Russian Dolls in this, really a nice metaphor, creative and fresh.

    Thank you ... good luck




  • Naridill
    December 10, 2007
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    What a ... ergh! Just wow!

  • Yvette Champ
    December 9, 2007

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    Oh my,this is so,so poignant,the masks in place for protection not for deciet,the layer upon layer of emotions revealed in the risk of revealing the last as one becomes unmasked and the shape of truth is perhaps whether we are able to stand straight within the weight of it or feel lighter for allowing ourselves to be shaped by it,as always a balance is needed between the attic and the basement so that within all levels the foundation is felt as strongly surely? As I've said before,to know,understand and accept the self is a gift given to the self,to be known,understood and accepted by another is a gift given from them.Without another truly knowing us we exist and when known we feel worthy of existence...


  • Rowan gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    "where we focus fortitude,
    that daily work holding phantoms
    and echoes in place."
    and damn hard work it is, at that.
    I agree, there is always more than meets the eye, even to our own eyes, when we chose to be remain blind. Trust, there's that word again. sigh.

    lol.
    Excellent as usual.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    I have a beautiful russian doll... she comes all the way from St Petersburg too.... i often play with her, sat here at my desk...

    i love how delicate they become, internally...

    yes... ?

    everything happens inside..

    good strong piece Katie..

    well done

    Gill.x

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