SCREAMS BREATHING
my head feels heavy,
dizzy maybe,
spinning, ‘round
an’round
an’ro
No…not dizzy.
It is S/H \A\R//P g
J g D and
A e
Lonely
But….but it’s not lonely…
There are voices, echoes, reoccurring
SCREAMS
That burn and blaze in the helpless lead
That weighs down the lids of sight.
I’m sleepy…so…sleepy…
There’s a warmth resting behind my head.
and I’m sure that morbid comfort rests
just behind the hazy cloud o’slumber
tha tas settled in
My
I
N
D
Gone…to sleep in a temporary state of com-
SCREAMS
BuRning, bleeding, B-BEGGING
Pleading
MS
EA
CR
S
that s.i.m.p.l.y. will not
L.et M.e B.e
They come and go like wavering
tides that longIngly look
at me with timid pleas of a
quick drowning of the pain
but forthwith will step no
Further
the leader of these lies and
they do not but SCREAM
Oh the
ech
ech
echoing.
It BuRnS.
It makes me di
Z
Z
Y
So d-dizzy.
NO! That is not
RIGHT
I’m S/H\\a/R\P.
But does sharpness bleed like me…
In a crimson wave threatening
To take part in a quick drowning…
The screams…
They belong to me…
They…..b-belong to me?
wh-why can’t I brea---the?
Author notes
I had fallen asleep in my boyfriend's lap...I started dreaming of someone screaming...and I gradually began waking up and experiencing what the poem described...turns out it was my little brothers who were screaming cause they were fighting....but that made me scream too.
Weird I know....but tell me what you think...I'm experimenting with new styles and whatnot...I seem to have lost my signature style.
KimberLea Cynn
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow... that was amazing!!
I like your ending, the way it tells that the screams were really yours... Great job... It reminded me of myself...
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Wow Kim, allthough the form did kinda confuse me a bit, it was cool looking and the poem was just amazing!!!! I don't think you've lost anything at all!
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hmm a suggestion, although i don't think it's my place, i'd rather just hand over my opinion, the whole form kind of ruined it for me, I just think that the words should sopeak for themselves, and the screaming would be much more frightful were it described through a calm voice, this all however just seemed messy to me
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I view it both ways...I think the formatting helps put a voice over it...a sound level...but I also that it takes away from the sophisticated and rhetoric stances of the whole piece. Thank you for the honest opinion!
I like having other peoples insight.
Cynn
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