Stephen Thought He Was A Prophet
Thought He Could Fortell
What Was Up Around The Bend
He Thought He'd Forseen Hell
For Every Man And Every Soul
So What Did Stephen Do?
He Tossed His Soul To Cruel, Fierce Fate
Just For Me And You
Dark Saint Stephen
Can You Save The Lives
Can Any One Man Really Hold That Darkness Up Inside
My Dear Dark Saint Stephen Have You Ever Seen The Light
My Dear Dark Saint Stephen Fufill Your Prophecy Tonight
Well Stephen Thought Hed Found The Darkness
Stephen Had A Plan
Too Take All Shadows On Himself
And So He'd Save The Land
But Stephen Underestimated How Strong The Dark Could Be
And The Darkness In Turn Very Swiftly Brought Him Too His Knees
Dark Saint Stephen
Lost Upon The Road
Can Any One Man Truly Bear Your Heavy Darkening Load
My Dear Dark Saint Stephen Have You Ever Seen The Light
My Dear Dark Saint Stephen Youll Find That Your Life Ends Tonight
So Stephen Tumbled Through The City, Gasping, Strapped For Air
Suddenly He Felt The Darkness Grasping Everywhere
Stephen Quickly Found A Knife And Thought It Heaven Sent
But When He Tried To Take His Life The Knife Was Only Bent
Dark Saint Stephen
Immortal In Your Jail
If Only You Could Find Some Light You Just Might Make The Bail
My Dear Dark Saint Stephen Have You Ever Seen The Light
My Dear Dark Saint Stephen Met Catastrophe And Blight
So Stephen Had An Idea Of What He Just Might Do
He'd Walk Straight In The Ocean And Sleep Down Among The Blue
He Knew That He Must Stay There Not A Moment To Delay
And Their Poor Dark Saint Stephen Lays Straight To This Very Day
Dark Saint Stephen
Lies Beneath The Sea
Maybe He Will find Some Comfort Sleeping Peacefully
Maybe One Day He'll Divine The God From The Machine
But Till Then Sleep Saint Stephen, And Allow Yourself To Dream
Allow Yourself To Dream
Author notes
originally started as a joke about saint stephen, my imaginary patron saint of goth/emo kids. turned into a serious poem. strange
A contest entry
- dark writes (just...make me feel something) by my--i u--k i.
542 points, ended January 28, 2008, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
PLEASE PLEASE COMMENT, Would be much obliged.
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I'm awed.
I think is the first dark piece i've ever read that has a 'good' side to it.
The very idea of a man taking all that evil for noble purposes is brilliant.
And the you painted a very real picture of what one would expect to transpire if it were even possible.
I even caught myself reading around the questionable grammar.
Brilliant piece.
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Superb
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Excellent write here
This is done with such perfection I say Bravo to the poet or poets of the day
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thank you very much! you have made my day.
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Even Saints Need 2 Spell Check
There are many glaring spelling errors, which shouldn't happen in a trophy poem, but oh well. I like the first few stanzas, they flow quite well and have rhymes that seem natural. Then you hit stanza three and the flow and rhyme becomes disjointed and forced. You have a marvelous poem to edit here, but this needs work still.
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haha thank you
thank you for the advice, im working on a lyrical version of this song, that tells the same story, only in three verses and a chorus, and yes i really really need to work on my editing.
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I am amazed that I liked your poem, I normally hate dark stuff. But this was done in good taste and in good humor. Hats off to you!
~cheers~
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you just made my day. seriously thank you haha
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Hed should be He'd
Youll should be you'll
and even if you just don't like apostrophies,
in "Too Take All Shadows On Himself" it should be "to"
I sincerally doubt that "Thusly" is a word...but I like it
the sixth stanza is great. it was clear to me how you intended me to read the poem, and so helped me to judge it.
in addition, this reminds me of the kind of poems a friend of mine writes.
it's very crude grammar-wise, very crude indeed.
yet, once again, i find myself saying ZOMG HOW THE HECK DOES THIS NOT MAKE FOR A HORRIBLE POEM
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haha thanks. and yes i have terrible grammar . workin on that i swear!
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omfg!!! i absolutely luv it. it makes an awesome story, and an awesome poem! do u sing this or w/ ur guitar or sumthin? if so i deff wanna hear it sumtime. i was really taken in by this wow.
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