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Engraved In My Heart

Engraved in my heart you
shall forever be.
When you passed away I was filled
with such misery.
In that room where you lay
still, I suddenly felt a cold chill.
It went right down my spine,
I knew from that moment on it
was just your time.
You were not only my Grandmother.
But, you were also my bestfriend.
Which you shall be that til the very end.

You were always the one to tend to me heart,

and even though your not here.

I know we shall never part.

Because, you're forever engraved in my heart.

 

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RIP
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I Wrote This Poem Not For This Contest. But, For My Grandmother Who Died On Feb.2nd.2002. It's Been A While Now That She Has Been Gone. But Through The People Who Love Her, Her Spirit Shall Live On.

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  • Demmy-Defect
    January 24, 2008
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    this was cute but i think near the end when you said "you were always they one to tend to me heart": dide you mean "my" or still just "me"? eh. only checking.

    other than that, this was so heartfelt! you can really see how much you loved your grandmother and everything. it had the wordchoice and rythm to go with, and all-on-all, very nice !


  • x Gemini x
    January 3, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest.

    Ah, common words, made personal.

    I like the way this poem is set up, with its background and style. Its an honest write, which really pulls the reader in.


  • XxshadowedcherryxX
    December 8, 2007

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    I Know Just How You Feel

    I have something quite similar written on my page. I went through the same thing on January 16, 1999. Please go read it and tell me what you think.

    Very good job. You made it very clear how you felt.


    • XXXDark--AngelXXX
      December 8, 2007
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      Thanx for your comment :] I shall read and comment yours as well. I'm sure there are alot of people who feel the pain we feel. But we just gotta keep pur heads up high.


  • irishmidnight
    December 8, 2007
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    forgot the stars...lol

  • irishmidnight
    December 8, 2007

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    God hun...this leaves pain etched in the soul...chills throughout the body...Its beautiful in it's sad way...I love it...beuatiful write!

    • XXXDark--AngelXXX
      December 8, 2007
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      Thanx for your kind words hun. Comments are very useful to me. For sometimes I doubt my own writes...which is bad but yeah. Thanx again for your comment hun

  • Acidanthra
    December 8, 2007

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    This is gold worthy! The emotions shed are pure and strong. There is nothing like the feelings of losing family, trust me on that one. As an orphan, these emotional losses have brought upon demons that are almost impossible to fight. You did an awesome job with this write. There were sections that were extremely thought and emotion provoking.

    • XXXDark--AngelXXX
      December 8, 2007
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      Thanks for your amazing words Mom. I appreciate every one of them. I wrote this Poem because I miss my Grandmother a lot. On Feb.2nd.2008 She'll have been gone for 7 years and the sadness still haunts me. I Love You Mommy, and Thanks again for your kind comment. I don't know if it is Gold worthy though...


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    nice

    This is precious and touching. I love how you said she wasnt just your grandmother but your best friend. I felt that way about my grandma also. well done princess Love you , daddy

    • XXXDark--AngelXXX
      December 8, 2007
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      Thanks For Your nice words Daddy. I Love You Too Daddy *huggles*. I wrote this because I haven't written a poem in almost 2 months and I couldn't stop thinking about her. Grandma's Are the best Thanks again Daddy for your Comment.


  • Arizona Sunset
    December 7, 2007

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    this is a beautiful poem for your grandmother. full of love, and engraved into your heart forever. Lovely, and tender. ~blessings always~

    • XXXDark--AngelXXX
      December 8, 2007
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      Thanx For Your Comment...My Sister In Law. I Am very glad you liked my poem. Your kindness is very much appreciated/

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