In Fairy Tales, there's happy endings
Good guys, bad guys, in between
Creatures made both large and small
Places like you've never seen
Princes rescue damsels fair
In 'once upon a time' ago,
Castles hide the dragon's lair
Ages past we'll never know
The Fairy Tale I tell takes place
In caverns deep and grassy plains
In hooded woods and stony keeps
Where only royalty remains
The royalty was fast asleep,
Dreams of riches in their heads
When bumps outside the windowsill
Roused the princess from her bed
It was her paramour, alas!
For fate had kept them far apart
For he, a theif, had taken clean
Away from her her very heart
In darkest night they met and talked
From eventide till break of day
And when the sun rose up each morn,
Oh woe to her! He ran away
For she was set to wed the one
Who could slay many vicious beasts
And though her lover was fair brave,
It was a task too great a feat
Her father would not sway his mind
She would marry only him
Who could rid kingdoms of their scourge
To go and fight at his high whim
The theif had come to tell his love,
"I'm off to slay the demons nigh"
She begged him not to go, but then
The sun came up and he did fly
Past the castle gates he ran
Faster than the wind he strove
To kill the beasts and prove to her
That he was worthy of her love
The foremost demon, vicious thing,
Had residence inside a cave
It took townspeople for its meals
And not-a-one had e'er been saved
With sword in hand he strode inside
The sleeping creature lay at bay
With quiet feet he crept close in
And with stout heart, the creature slayed
Wiping blood from face and sword,
He left the cave to find the next
Who would dare plague the castle now,
Risking his eternal rest?
The youth found then the beast of lore
Dragon, named for wicked things
The scorcher of the village fields
And stealer of much costly things
It was a fight, for Dragon rose
High into the blue-skied air
And, blowing fire at the boy,
Flapped his wings and stayed up there
But paramour, with true love's strength,
Hurled his sword up at the foe
The beast was slain, Dragon lay dead
He had but one more beast to go
The woods guarded the creature last
For this was the most loathe to die
It used the trees and hid in leaves
It was the hardest beast to spy
But find the creature, the boy did
And fought it to the very last
Earning him a scar or two
And the test he'd finally passed
Returning to the castle gates,
Holding heads of the three beasts,
The youth wanted to see the king
And force him to his promise keep
The princess cried, "My love is back!
"And see, the three great beasts are slain!
"Let the wedding bells be rung!"
It echoed out, joyous refrain
The king sat on his golden throne
The face below his noble crown
Appearing to be deep in thought
Twisting up into a frown
True, the boy had slain the beasts
He had with him their heads as proof
But his daughter, precious girl,
Just could not wed to this youth!
He was a vagabond, a thief
A crooked man not to be trusted
With sticky fingers, this boy crept
Into homes and treasures busted!
His daughter would wed to no thief,
No commonborn of little name
She'd be married to a prince
For he'd been forced to do the same
Wed to one he did not love
Marry high to royalty
To a girl for whom he felt
Not a drop of loyalty
The boy was carried off just then
Into the local village jail
The princess lay awake at night
Waiting for his loving wail
She listened hard, she listened long
But no love song did meet her ear
And though she waited 'till the sun,
Never did her love appear
Through searching eyes and careful ears
Did she learn of lover's plight
And, waiting for the sun to set,
Stole from the castle in the night
To his windowed cell she crept
A bag of money in her hand
She'd line the jailer's purse and then
Free from jail the innocent man
The key turned in, the lock it clicked
And from the cell her lover sprang
Hand-in-hand they left the jail
And then the wedding bells were rang!
At confrontation, the king confessed
Her father conceded the boy had passed
They took the altar, said their vows,
Kissed, and then were wed at last!
A happy ending never was
Until the two had held their hands
The test of time and strength they passed
And still their love the tests can stand
In Fairy Tales, there's happy endings
Good guys, bad guys, in between
Creatures made both large and small
Places like you've never seen
Princes rescue damsels fair
In 'once upon a time' ago,
Castles hide the dragon's lair
Ages past we'll never know
At least you got a glimpse of this,
Another tale of long ago
What happened to the king himself?
Another tale we'll never know...
Author notes
HOLY CRAP!! The longest thing I've ever written...Believe it.
A contest entry
- Write Me a Fairy Tale by Veronica Leigh.
467 points, ended December 30, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Chivalry by Frodofan.
600 points, ended December 14, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Fairy Tale (Need More Entries!!) by xTomorrowx.
450 points, ended March 18, 2008, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I'm not typing anymore, my fingers hurt. Just review, please....
Comments
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Wow...
I love it, it's a great fairy tale, and I have no idea how you kept the rhyme going throughout the whole thing...
I believe you should be very proud of this, it was long and still brilliant, long poems tend to get me bored after a while, sometimes I don't even read them, if I see a poem with more than 50 lines I usually don't read it, unless it's in one of my contests, because it's my duty... But this poem, it was great, it held my attention throughout the entire piece...
Brilliant work, thanks heaps for entering my contest and good luck! =)
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*laughs* I'm so happy that my long poem could keep you amused where others fell lacking...did that make any sense? Oh well. I can understand the 50-line thnigy; this is by far the longest poem I've ever written and will be for a long time. Thanks so much for your praise!
(And yes, my fingers were all wonky after typing it.
Thanks for the silver!)
-Vivian
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Great poem
I'm not even going to try and compete against this one. What a body of work. Great! -
The stanzas you began with and the ones you end with had a fairly good rhythm, but you lost this a lot in the other parts. It became pretty rough and I noticed a typo or two so look it over.
I like the story and the glimpse into that magical world that you gave me.
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Understandably, surely? The loss of tempo...I see it changing overtime. Yes. But that's because, well...I've never written a poem this long before, and it was all from scratch. The rhythm was kinda come-as-it-did...If that makes any sense. And typos? Thought I got all of those buggers out...but I'll look it over again. Spell check and everything.
Thank you for the critique and criticism, I'll do my best to improve in the future!
-Vivian
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Wonderful! I really enjoyed this one. The story is great and the rhyme scheme is amazing. Beautiful job!


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wow, love this is a long poem. i like the whole fairy tale thing. it sort of reminded me about the movie we watched. good luck in the contest!
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*Glad. Whoopsie.
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...How did it remind you of August Rush? I don't really see it, but okay...I'm so gald you actually read the whole thing through, honey! Thank you so much!!!!
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the whole forbidden love concept
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