Black holes hold everything.
Don't get too close! Or else - Zing!
Into the black you will go,
becoming part of the show.
You'll find yourself swirling,
with other junk that is twirling.
Tossed and turned, and thrown about,
the only thing you want...is out!
Sliding down into the funnel,
you finally see light, through the tunnel.
Moving your arms, as if swimming,
towards the light, darkness dimming.
Squeezing through, with a pop!
Onto the other side, you plop.
Floating suspended in the air,
as if something solid were there.
You have a hard time believing your eyes,
galaxies of articles, fill the skies.
All of the things, that you never found,
are swirling and twirling and dancing around.
Your hairbrush, that new pen, your pet rock!,
remote control, wallet, and one lone sock.
Two mysteries I've solved with this little tour,
black holes eat all that is missing, I'm sure.
Author notes
And spits them out...the other side...
A contest entry
- What's Within a Black Hole? by aslanlight.
600 points, ended December 30, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A lovely light touch added to the contest. Did you happen to see my drivers liscence while you were there? Your idea could be developed further because when you took me to the other side I found myself with an air of eager expectation, wondering what'd be there. You could write some amazing Sci-fi or Fantasy from this beginning.
Peace Georgia
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Your license may have been there...
there were plenty of them! lol...
Take care...I've thought of expanding this...
Thanks!
Hau'oli Makahiki Hou!
Happy New Year!
*PEACE*
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It must be such a relief and release to make it through.
Love the humour. I wonder how many of my umbrellas are in there! -
A very different, but amusing rendition of a "black hole'!!!!!!!!!!! I like it!!!!! The reading was easy and the flow of words was great!!!!! Best wishes in the contest!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wacky, surreal and amusing...
Great descriptive imagery and engaging narrative draws the reader in to this journey you're on.
Love it!!!
Another great piece you have written here...
Well done!!!
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Interesting write
Oh the muse of the dreary black hole leave one in wonder
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