I get lost in your words
because you always know exactly what to say
you always put a smile on my face
I wouldn't have it any other way
I get lost in your eyes
with just a single look
baby, you've got me in a trance
and one glance was all it took
I get lost in your kiss
because it just blows me away
I wish you had a clue what I felt
but I swear I'll show you someday
I get lost in your touch
and it's so easy to see
I want to lose myself with you
and you to lose yourself with me
A contest entry
- anything that'll make anybody happy! by FindinSoundInSilence.
474 points, ended July 7, 2008, 64 entries
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I get lost in your eyes
with just a single look
baby, you've got me in a trance
and one glance was all it took
don't we all wish this would happen to us -
this is very nice. i like it.
is in the fouth line the 'but' just doesn't seem right... -
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hmm... now that you mention it, I think I agree. When I read it, it sounds better without it. Thanks! I think I'll go change it.
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Awww
What a sweet poem!! Twas easy to relate to I'll grant you that
I hope this boy knows how spesh he is, if your poem is anything to go by !!
Loved the rhyming pattern too, i didn't even realise it was there until i re-read it then, so that proves it doesn't sound forced.
An excellent write
Claire xx
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Beautiful
This is a excelant poem that alot of people can relate to. I have felt this way for my last love and wish every day they would feel the same. Very good wook, keep on writing.
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the last two lines i thought were brilliant. nice rhymeing scheme.
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thats so true and anyone can relate to it, i wish i could feel that way about someone
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This is beautiful. I love it. It was so happy till I read someday you'll show that person how you feel, really.
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awwwwwww
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I love it!!!! It sounds alot like me and my bf
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provoking
i like it. kinda cliche....but what love poem isnt?
lol. i like it thos. i think i like the last stanza most. i dont think of love when i read it though i think of lust. -
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GREAT WRITE!!!
I think that this piece is really romantic and i think that it flows really well, I hope that you could enter this into a contest, it would do really well. I hope you get many comments. I hope that you keep up the good writing!!!
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Good Job!
I liked it, I thought it was really romantic and it had flow,, and it is nice to see some people can punctuate Good work. 
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Very good
This poetic trip though the heart is, thought provoking, descriptive, and creative all rolled up into a beautiful poem. It flows well and holds your interest from start to finish. This poem comes alive within the reader's heart as the story unfolds gently before them. The imagery and emotions lift you from your world and place you in a world of innocence and youthful passion.
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