Swirling forever this vortex of night
Sucking it's power from all failed light
The absence of Love and the Lovers delight
Make this Black hole a vacuum of spite.
Misery reigns in this unstable place
Lover's cast off and cast down in disgrace
Feeling the harshness of life, just like mace
Reeling in feelings so far moved from grace.
Herein lies hope and those dreams gone astray
To rumble and tumble 'till crumbled away
Lost here forever without light of day
No hope of redemption just blackness, no gray!
Here in this whirling, swirling maze
All time is lost, as eternity sways
Relentless retribution unceasing it pays
And Nothingness permeates it's height in the craze.
A contest entry
- What's Within a Black Hole? by aslanlight.
600 points, ended December 30, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
point out misspellings or things I can improve upon in a kind and friendly way--THANKS!
Comments
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'instable' - unstable. I'm not certain what you mean by failed light? This is a grim picture of a Black Hole, it could be the setting of a King horror movie. An endless place where people go raving mad! The last line is excellent and leaves me with a feeling that you're not describing an absence of everything but a terrible something....
Peace Georgia
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Sounds like hell without the hellfire. No love, not much of anything really. No light and no hope.
A really unusual take, spiritual rather than astronomical.
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Excellent portrait of the "black hole". Great write!!!!!
Best wishes to you in the contest!!!!!! -
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Thanks for your kind and favorable comments.
David
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