The smell of cigarettes filled the air
But I didn't much care
I can't stand them
But I didn't throw a tantrum
The fogginess bellowed around me
But I wasn't upset you see
The smoke reminds me of you
Every-time I smell it, It's true
The alcohol came out...
And that showed my faults, no need to pout
Best friend of mine I love you
If you can see through all that,say you need me too.
Author notes
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OPTION 10!
A contest entry
- Inspiration by what went wrong.
390 points, ended January 18, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A sort of sad feel to this one
Well penned just the same...thanks for sharing it 
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yeah...
It's a bit sad.
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Well... this was very simple. Not too shabby. I think that the rhyming was a little... unoriginal, but other than that this was nicely done. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I can't help but think that maybe you are using some strong symbolism here. Like maybe it isnt exactly cigarettes... Some definite beautiful writing here!
Thank you for sharing!
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good
This sums up what friendship is about. Everyone has their faults but true friends see past that. Your friend is lucky to have you
Thanks alot for entering this into my contest and good luck!
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hmmm oddly familiar. I think I might have lived this too. I liked it, and I like the AABB rhyme sequesnce it's always nice to read that...but the only fault with this piece I could find was the last four lines rhymed more like TGBB which is pretty much me saying they first two fo the four dont rhyme, and it kind of threw off the rhythm. over good piece
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Awww so touching and honest here, I love it how you explains the smoke and the love, it's like not seeing through because of the blurry vision...
Marlboro lights,
Antonio
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Wonderful piece here, like all poems of yours it is filled with meaning...
Love it! I hate smoking too.....
All the best!
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This is a good piece that kind of friendship is a precious gift someone to grab you through the fog of life thanks for sharing this with me best wishes and much love
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