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The First Snowdome

Once upon a Christmastown

filled with joy, peace, and goodwill

lived a family very well known

whom experienced a tragic chill.

Sit right back and enjoy this tale

of true love forever shown

in a town adored and loved well

that became the town's first snowdome.

There was a chill flowing around town that warned everyone Jack Frost was near returning, again. He visited his family for 3 months. The townspeople were mixed with emotions at his mention and his presence because of the horrific event quite a few years ago.

Jack fell in love with a Fireville girl. She was a hot number that melted Jacks heart and captured him forever. His family did not approve of her. They tried to convince Jack that SizzleLilac would destroy him, the townspeople, and the town. He did not believe them and one year after they had alopted and married they visited Jacks family. Lilac was totally surprized by the cold reception. Jack had purchased a coat for her but because of how hot she was it melted as soon as she put it on. Upon their arrival the young sprites in all their joy and glee of seeing Uncle Jack ran to him and gave him hugs n kisses. They instantly turned to his bride and did the same and met their untimely instant meltaway deaths.

Lilac did not understand how this happened because she was never aware of such things in her town, nor had it happen between Jack and her. Jack explained that he was under medical care on a new drug that was to keep him from melting when in close contact with something hot from Fireville. He was taking, Vioxnot. The children on the otherhand were not taking the drug and were succeptable to the heat. They, being as young as they were did not know this could happen. Lilac was in a state of shock over this.

Now, the laws that govern the town were different from Fireville's. If a child is hurt in any way the law states that the one who did the crime will be condemned forever to be frozen alive for as many years as the child is old. Jack tried to reason with the town government representatives, Amaryllis, Poinsettia, and Winter Rose as well as his family. He told them that the children were unaware of such a thing to happen as was his bride...a lack of knowledge, and he asked for leaniancy. The extent of the sentence equaled 27 frozen years. Because of Jacks logical plea the years were reduced to 6.75 and upon her Thawparole she would no longer be welcomed in Christmastown.

6.75 years have now passed by and this years arrival of Jack meant the thaw of his bride was near. He came home excited to be reunited with his dear love. On Christmas Eve the frozen block with Lilac was wheeled to the town square. The town maintenance crew prepped the heat lamps around the block and turned them on. Everyone around the square watched in anticipation as the block quickly melted to reveal a very cold, wet, and withered Lilac. Suddenly her petals and leaves fell to the grown. SizzleLilac was existant no more. She could not thrive or live in such frigid conditions. Jack dropped to the ground beside her, picking up his dear love to hold her one last time. He began weeping. His tears surrounded them, slowly layering upwards around them. The tears glistened with glitter, encasing them on a frozen globelike slab in the center of town forever.

Jack cried himself to death. SizzleLolac and Jack Frost would forever remain in Christmastown and this became the worlds very first Snowdome.

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  • straighttalker gold member
    November 10

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    Very good tale! I enjoyed reading it, and it was surely unusual and creative. A nice way of telling about how the tragedies and punishments of society result in long lasting and permanent effects. Thanks for a an enticingly worded poem leading into such an interesting tale!


  • SatanicTemptation09
    December 8, 2007
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    this was great story, but i was looking more for a poetic feel to it. it began poeticlly then turned prose. the imagination and theme of it was very good, but i was also looking for how YOU felt about the holidays. i really dont see how your true emotions of the season were in this. good job tho with the story itself
    Thank you for entering


  • Melodies
    December 8, 2007

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    What an imagination you have!

    A great writing job here with a story that springs to life! Hey, this is just GREAT and I loved reading it.

  • Revwilliamfoos
    December 8, 2007

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    loved this

    i think that i have just laughed myself to death as I read this one i just think that i may have met that gal from fireville but it was not passion she just burned me up... this made my day
    love the rev


  • debilynn gold member
    December 7, 2007

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    an unusual story with a different ending. you have quite the imagination! thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always


  • jaykayXD
    December 7, 2007
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    Very long, but it's different. I like.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    December 7, 2007

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    i liked that part, she was a hot number, haven't heard
    that in a while, that was good! oh my goodness, that
    was wonderfully and darkly done! Good job dear poet!
    i wasn't expecting that....really good job!
    So, that's how we got all those darn snow globes...
    i always wondered about that!
    great job! how fun this must have been to
    write!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen : )) loved it!!


  • catz Moderators member
    December 7, 2007

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    This is such a sad tale, I guess not everything has a totally happy ending but at least they'll be remembered in a bittersweet sort of way.

    Good luck in the contest

    Love and
    Dee

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