Laughing as you watch the throbbing blue vein,
your mind doesn't comprehend their pain.
Let the rivers of blood swiftly flow red,
until they are all disfigured and dead.
Giving you a sharp hostile look,
you rip the flesh with a sharp hook.
A sickly grin you continue to slash,
whilst on the floor your victim does thrash.
Torn flesh reveals the creamy bone,
materials needed to construct your throne.
Puncturing the stomach, rancid contents drain,
eyes screaming loudly, you're deeply insane.
Decapitated and dead corpses lay,
time to lead your minions, show the way.
Tonight you've become Lord of the Dead,
that is until you wake up in bed.
Author notes
Option 3 title:- Dreaming of a Massacre
Option 3) Gothic/dark
Option 3 picture and I think it also falls into option 2 the word pain.
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You've done a really good job on the rhyme in this piece, the images are solid and the storyline flows well. It is a gruesome tale indeed
I like it.
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Strongly penned. The picture creeps the hell outta me
Great flow and rhyme.
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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VERY
well done.
you wanna know something very fucked up and twisted??
I ACTUALLY have had dreams like this since i was a child (ever since i could remember) i've had dreams where people are brutally butchered and mutilated.
Probably why this stuff doesn't bother me,
Anyway, you've done another amazing job, kudos
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I really like your rhyming ability. This is really dark and graphic. Thank you for sharing with the group. Nice job.
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AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!
I loved it and it completely matched the topic!!! I really did like it, best of luck.
Thanks for entering,
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Clever as hell and the ending was the show stoper.
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hahahaha. this was great. this was totally different then i had pictuerd it being wrote but i looooveeed it! It was amazingly brilliant! Great job!
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WOW, so this answers
my question about
how you sleep at night..lol
Other peoples horrors
are your sweet dreams
I love your imagination !!!
and I love the way you write
no-one does it better hun!!!
~Pastel
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Very well written!This is some powerful stuff. So dark and evil! Great imagery and great rhyming. I can just picture this being done. You have a sick and twisted mind. I like it. keep penning!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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