Laundry night tonight,
and it's my turn.
I'm tired, but I'll do it.
Your socks, my shirts
our underwear.
I get home and
the dryer's spinning.
You're folding shirts
and you smile.
No words, just smiles.
A contest entry
- Cat says ..... by Suzanne Dia.
600 points, ended December 28, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Suggestions and critical comments are welcome.
Comments
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you had a really good idea here- wish you might have explored the intermingling of the clothes in the washing machine- i think that may have garnered gold.. you touch on it but then you seem to back off..
nicely written
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this is sweet. wish i had laundry nights like this, lol. it isn't entirely industrial, but a sweet entry all the same
Good luck and thank you for entering.
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awww! I love this! It really accomplished what the contest was looking for, in my opinion. I felt love there, and you didn't have to spell it out for me. Well done, and best of luck!
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I love this! The image is fantastic and the emotion is of pure love. I actually think it's a love poem.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you. To me, nothing is more about love than little things like helping out with hated chores.
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Short and straight to the point. I love it.
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Thank you.
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i liked this. it felt homey
and nice...just a small but
sweet slice of life...Love, Lane
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Thank you.
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This made me smile.
Great job.
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Thank you. I'm glad it brought a smile to your face.
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any man that will fold, is good in my books. And a smile works for me.
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aww. that's love.
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Thank you.
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guess it can be taken as a love poem. i love it. great job.
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Thank you.
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really sweet
you left me nothing to complain about
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I'm glad you like it. Thank you.
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Awww,now that's love, a pretty good relqtionship when he volentarily helps with laundry. This really is a nice poem, expresses those little things which help each other to feel special
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Thank you.
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Excellent
To write for this contest is really difficult, but you have really captured the true spirit of caring and love in a good relationship. Really well done, an excellent poem. I wish you All Good Luck in the contest. All my very best wishes from Rose xx
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece.
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This has a nice intimate feeling to it, in a down to earth way.
Nice write and good luck in the contest -
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Thank you.
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