Screams, come from under the rubble,
as the building collapses.
Black ashes, the smell of flesh burning,
scattered charcoaled remains.
The taunting agony, of hopelessness and despair,
clouds so thick vision impossible.
Ventilation improbable,
body parts everywhere.
A dog chewing on a hand,
looks up with a crimson grin.
Evil lurking,
for Lucifer stand tall and strong.
His soldiers raping and killing any survivors.
But first he must have their soul.
Ripping and tearing their heart ,
straight from their chest.
Finally he feast.....
Author notes
hellish Brutality....
A contest entry
- Hellish Brutality by hommie-t.
600 points, ended December 16, 2007, 15 entries
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this is just as the title of the contest says: hellish brutality. i can picture everything in my head.. but just on a personal note of honesty: i kinda wish there was a bit more gore.. but thats just me.
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Wow that gave me chills down ma back!!!!
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Great poem Dear
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WOW!! With a name like CherrOn Top this was something I never would have expected from you. Gret piece of dark poetry my friend.
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Who are ...
Lucifer's soldiers? Nice write. Very descriptive.
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Wicked good!!
gave me goosebumps
~Pastel
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This was a great write 'n I enjoyed reading it...fits the mood I'm in at the moment...*evil laugh*
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You just sent chills throughout my entire body with the dark and scary thoughts that brought vivid images to my mind's eye. Filled with power and emotion you rocked. All I could think of when I started to read was the tragedy of 9/11 and then an even worse horror struck. Although, one could imagine Lucifer standing there that fateful and tragic day grinning at the victims as he tore their hearts from their chests and the chests of their families and friends left behind. A superb write. Thank you for sharing with all of us. Love and God bless you always, in all ways. Joyce 
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i hate lucifer he should die
i love you auntie
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wow lucky dog
great write hunni, well done 
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Very dark and very descriptive. Lines nine and ten sent shudders down my back because of the intensity of the idea and visuals.
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