In the darkest depths of this winterland,
do you hear what i hear?
The growling of a killer's masquerade.
Do you see what i see?
The birds of death,
cawing out your name--
he will bind and handcuff your lies,
then he'll slash to snuff out your life.
All your nightmares bleed in sacrifice,
do you hear what i hear?
screaming through this horror lullabye.
Do you see what i see?
a fantasy,
butchered fallacies,
throat is cut to silence the pleas,
winter's washed in crimson regrets.
Now i bathe in the carcass to relieve,
all this burning hatred,
((hatred))
that i've had for so many years.
Illuminating fear,
screams of death,
echo through my head,
symphonies clash through maddened minds,
gutting hope of reality.
Author notes
This is set to the tune of the song: "Do you Hear What i Hear."
If no one has heard of it, here's a link to the Carrie underwood version (bah.....it was the only version i could find or had the patience to)
(BTW, JUST A HEADS UP IN CASE SOMEONE SEE'S CARRIE UNDERWOOD AND WANTS TO TALK TO ME ABOUT COUNTRY MUSIC:
I DO NOT LIKE COUNTRY MUSIC....NOR DO I REALLY LISTEN TO IT. THERE ARE A FEW SONGS I LIKE....BUT VERY MINIMAL:
http://youtube.com/watch?v=wLhL0UQwJ8E
A contest entry
- We Wish You A Scary Christmas by Dmonik.
1750 points, ended January 1, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Creepy Carols by BleedingKittii.
450 points, ended January 1, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Christmas Present of the not so Merry kind.(Options all around) by Danneh.
660 points, ended January 15, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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AMAZING
I loved this, a dark twist to an original classic, you hit the nail on the head, HARD. That special scary nature mood to this is the total fuckin highlight!!
Great job sister and congrats on those trophies
~Emily~ xx
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I love this poem/christmas carol, when i was reading this poem i had this imagery in my mind, very well done. I also think this poem is very funny in a sick disturbing way
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LOL
I meant to respond to this sooner. THanks so much for your comment. I've never done a horror poem based on a christmas carol before, soooo.....when the opportunity showed itself i decided to try it out
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This is definitely creepy, but it's the beautifully-twisted kind of creepy, not morbid-creepy. I have to say, I very much enjoyed it. Congrats on the well-deserved gold
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HAHA, THANKS SO MUCH! ^_^
Glad you liked it. Welcome to my twisted mind
Bah.....i'm not THAT crazy. Thanks again
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Bravo. I'mm going to sing this one before I sing "Jingle Bombs"
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AH HAHA, Dan, yeah, i'm sure you will
I can totally see you singing this,
oh really i can!
^_^
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Oh, yet another one I'm going to memorize and sing at Christmas time. I love this. The melody to this song is haunting by itself, adding a haunting content and hearing the echo as I sing was just...awesome. Great job and thanks for entering!
Good luck!
~Kittii
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This is just absolutley amazing. Period. Everything that need be said has been said. Simply...Sadistically..amazing. =D
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like evil santa, good one have to remenber it at next random patry....thinks hard, craps brick
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i love it.
it's really interesting and i love the repeation of 'do you hear what i hear' it's awesome. -
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THANKS FOR YOUR COMMENT!
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yeah no problem.
=D
thanks for writing such a cool poem.
lol i sound retarded but it's all good. -
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HAHA! No ya didn't but....I'LL BE RETARDED WITH YA!
*dances*
Yep, i'm a fuckin spaz!
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WOW amazing i really liked this one,not one most people would sing on christmas but who knows now some may do that,lol
great write
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I really do like it, my only complaint would be that listening to Carrie Underwood in the background takes away from it. Some people voices just bother me and she has one of them. Now you need to find someone to sing it and sell the CD hehe, I would be the first in line.
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wow, you know this is actually better then the original!
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LOLOL
Yeah, it actually really sucks (my version). LOL
but i've never done anything like this before so IT WAS FUN AND INTERESTING!!!
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Beautiful.
Oh Darci, this is gorgeous. I am amazed. Brilliant! I missed your work. Good job!!! Hey I dare you to write a poem on control and the bliss of it the feel. fuzzy hasnt gotten the chance and i want to see what u make of it. -
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haha, and i back down on NO challenge.....
I can make of it what i want, right?? Is there any restrictions?
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Excellently penned my dear friend...A very sick take on the original tune, One that fits perfectly for this contest...All the best.
T.S
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LOL
thanks! It was fun writing this although it could have came out better! haha, my muse was fast asleep.
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Thanks for your entry. I shall read it thoroughly upon judging.
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Thanks for entering. Good Luck
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Wowzer!!
Wow! Great piece!! Awesome, goes word for word, a drastic improvement on the original...lol. Good luck in your contest
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Nice job my sick and twisted friend!!!! I think I will make a recording of this to play tomorrow while we decorate our tree!!! Course it might give the little ones nightmares.....hahaha.....LOVE IT!!!
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LOLOL
HAHA, THANKS!
^_^
haha, hell, it would be an even better write if it was more sick and twisted!! I've never done this before, haha, Dmonik inspired me! You should read some of the ones he's written. They're pretty good.
ENTER THE CONTEST!!!
=D
You can check it out now.
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Oh god I laughed. There might be something wrong with me. The words actually go with the beat to the song, that can be hard to do. Good work.
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LMFAO
HAHA, Dmonik inspired me with his contest AND I'VE NEVER DONE THIS BEFORE! I ADORE THIS SONG, so.....i decided to go with this one.
THIS WAS SO HARD....
O.O
I'm not quite pleaed with how this came out, but....GOOD ENOUGH! i'm to lazy
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