I am a rat...
it's true you see
I was born in 1960
but shhhhh...
please don't tell anyone.
I refuse to grow old
I don't feel a day
over thirty.
But I digress
so let's get back
to me. (hee hee)
My element is metal
and mine's been tested
so now I rarely settle
abhor being bested.
I read that it's nifty
to be a metal rat
supposedly thrifty
and cunning at that.
With my year at hand
my powers should peak
and if I understand
a lucky streak...
is heading my way.
A contest entry
- 2008 Year of the Rat by ea.
1000 points, ended December 20, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i love your poem a great write i am a sheep baa
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Quite cleverly penned my friend! A slice of the chinese pie per say. You gave this a wonderful flow and rhythm
Danced almost as I read, very good Missy ~Tia
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well, let's hope that lucky streak holds out and keeps right on coming my way, too- I always wondered how this works for all of us born in that year. Anywhoo, cute poem; very lively and metalic. Happy New Year of the Rat!
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Word play is good
The rythme scheme thingy ( oh I always get confused ) is good. -
I do wish I were a rat after reading this . ha ha. Tis a fun read at that. clever and insightful giving me a full expo on what the rat should be. nice script.
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This is great! Fast flowing and captivating. So you're a Rat huh? I cute rat.
Love,
Amera♥
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Oh, the year of my younger brother's birth! Wonderful attributes for this year, I shall return as your poem progresses.....
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