Hollow streams of thought,
flooded by black rain.
Showers of darkness,
color the phantoms dancing.
Bringing sight to the forgotten,
neglected and misplaced.
Figments highlighted by shadow,
shattered shards of broken dreams.
Lying underfoot and scattered about,
covered in emotional droplets.
Each holding a special scene,
past haunting's and repressed imagery
Winds of memories tug my heart,
along cold halls where love once lived
Dodging ruts of quicksand,
refusing to sink again.
Spotting the me I seek,
running forward only to be bounced back
Tears stream while I watch,
the me I used to be
Between the drugs and loss of love,
that lovely girl is but a ghost.
Lost in a labyrinth of reflection.
Turning I wander, finding a new light to follow.
Author notes
Prompt:"Shadow confessions - where do you roam in your secrets?"
Chosen Picture #1~Curtesy of the contest holder.
My name is Delightfulmess Aka Delila
Please tell me what you think
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Oh wow auntie as always you have written a piece with such amazing imagery that is seen within each line. I just love your take on the prompt well done
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Wow! What amazing imagery! Your words gave me chills and filled me with sadness. The flow was excellent. Great job!
Lauren
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Winds of memories tug my heart,
along cold halls where love once lived
Dodging ruts of quicksand,
refusing to sink again.
this line reminds me of someone who stole something from me only to lost it somewhere in time hehehe.
i like this piece more than i like the prompt hehehe. beautifully penned. thanks for sharing. -
wow... This is amazing. I love how you penned this. The descriptions are amazing. They are dark, and brilliant. Very deep, and really though evoking...
Great poem...
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Wow, such a capivating confession. So much sorrow, but still feeling like there could be some hope left. I really like your imagery, and the words you have used for this write. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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This is a very nice piece. The picture is haunting and I think the mood of the poem captures that. I like your use of words, it brought it to life. Good work.
. Rewarded 4
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Great write
I like this piece a lot-so deep in imagery. You are able to express more eloquently that which many of us feel, and our attempts pale in comparison to this piece. Keep up the good work! -
Very insightful and creative take on the picture. This is a very nice write and the imagery is great. I especially like this, "Figments highlighted by shadow,
shattered shards of broken dreams.
Lying underfoot and scattered about,
covered in emotional droplets.
Each holding a special scene,
past haunting's and repressed imagery." Nice! Patty
. Rewarded 6
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Great poem, it has a lot of imagery and dark feelings.
"Winds of memories tug my heart,
along cold halls where love once lived"
I loved these lines because I can sort of relate to this feeling of loss. -
Love that first stanza - the dark emptiness, yet brings color to phantoms and sight to the ignored. Stanza 2 - shattered/scattered, nice, figments and shards of dreams holding repressed scenes -strong images. Stanza 3 - memories as wind, very nice analogy. The quicksand/ruts, very cool. The discouragement is pure nightmare. Stanza 4 - tears, that's a good sign... confession and forgiveness. And thankfully you turn.
Very nice write of a passage through labyrinthian ordeal.
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Well you know that this is just a brilliant piece love you lots
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Brilliant write thanks for sharing it with us
you're todays poem for the 18th [yes im a little late im sorwy
] you're featured also! woohoo
Tasha
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While the innocence of early youth is now gone, the woman that rises from the ashes of her own pain is stronger and more beautiful for the battle scars she bears on her heart and flesh. Weep not, darling, for the child that was for if she still existed, then you might not be here to gift us all with your words and feelings. I am so proud to know you and to know that you have struggled in life and survived. Thank you for being the wonderful gift that you are to all of us.
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Oh this is a most wonderful penning.
I love the imagery and wording
A stunning poem indeed
Best of wishes to you.
Tony
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Thank you for entering my humble little contest. I am having fun exsposing myself to something different. Good luck
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great write sis. I wish you had entered my contest, wait, that would have been bad cause it would have been ever harder to judge.
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Excellent poem that surely deserves gold. I like everything about this write.
Winds of memories tug my heart,
along cold halls where love once lived
Dodging ruts of quicksand,
refusing to sink again.
Spotting the me I seek,This is my favorite stanza, though it is hard to pick one over another. Very well-written and touching.
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Excellent
Very powerful poem. So full of great images. Congratulations on your gold.
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That is a very intersting photo and your poem matches it well.
Congratulations on the gold.
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The title is an immediate catch.
"Love once lived" is a fantastic alliteration. Sounds nice to read or sounds nice to say out loud. :]
Another dark poem, but fantastically dark. :] -
this is a master piece congrats on the gold well deserved
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This is awesome....
Picture and all!
A true gold!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Bravo Poet!! Standing in Applause!
Great job on this. Congratulations on a well deserved GOLD.
~Pamela
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I liked the whole tone of this from start to finish. The display of emotion upon imagery is amazing. Wonderful creation
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This is such an amazing piece of thought you have penned here. Very well written lines to express those hidden depths within. Excellent use of imagery to alight the darkened stage. I really enjoyed this... These lines especially:
"Winds of memories tug my heart,
along cold halls where love once lived
Dodging ruts of quicksand,
refusing to sink again.
Spotting the me I seek,
running forward only to be bounced back"
Great penning!
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Your heart speaks volumes in this excellent poem sweet cousin. I love the language and the imagery. Your last stanza stood out to me...there are always new lights to follow! Excellent take on the prompt. Best to you in the contest~ blessings always ~
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My Sunshyne
There is a light
the one you seek,
it's in your heart
so take a peek.
Just a glimmer you will find
the light of hope waiting there.
Let it grow to consume your mind
and fed by those of us who care.
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Wow. This is stellar. I think you ran with this picture prompt beautifully. Well done. ~Pamela
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I love this
Winds of memories tug my heart,
along cold halls where love once lived
Dodging ruts of quicksand,
refusing to sink again.
Spotting the me I seek,
running forward only to be bounced back
No get out of my dark corner run towards the light
.Goodluck in the contest much love
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strong imagery and metaphor... particularly that of the title, when alone, leaves a lot to the imagination but once the reader delves into the piece, there is a clarity to this comparison that cannot be denied... beautifully composed... heart felt and a piece that tugs at the heart strings because of that... I love the serenity and hope conveyed in the final line... it is difficult to be a reader and not to identify with the all too human experiences and struggles that the author writes of, whether they one can picture oneself in said situations or encountering such circumstances specifically or not... your honesty and the vulnerability that you allow yourself to expose within this piece are refreshing and poetic...
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Wow this was deep and good I read it three times out loud and it was flat good good good. Very personal and sad but so beautiful, This is touchiung dear very well done.
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