If windows are the eyes to the soul,
Then why can't you see?
When you look into my eyes,
That my soul is longing for us to be.
In my heart I'm begging, for a second chance,
But on the outside, my brain is forcing me to stand.
I can only watch, teary eyed,
As I'm seeing you holding her hand.
Inside my heart's crying,
But my brain's fighting to keep my eyes dry.
My mind slowly loses control,
And I look away as I start to cry.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- + I'll Never Stop Loving You + by ThatONEweirdChick.
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Comments
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that was an amazing poem. it was beautiful and showed so much pain. i'm sorry that that happened.
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A very sad piece. Unrequited love is very hard. I loved how much emotion you expressed in such a few words, it brought out so much in my mind. I hope things improve. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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wow!
I love the development of this piece. It starts from sadness to giving up.
"Then why can't you see?
When you look into my eyes,
That my soul is longing for us to be."
these lines are awesome and offer just enough pain to make it seem like this person really matters.
This happens to so many of us and we have to try to live. If this is true, I am sure things will get sorted out soon. Good luck!
love,
transit
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wonderful write...love the way you've laid in what love seems to be.. thank you for entering and for followin the rules too!
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very sad but beautiful poem, that I can also relate to.
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Oh I know exactly where you're coming from. It's a terrible feeling to see someone you love with someone else. This poem is very good though. Thank you for entering. Good luck.
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Yes... I totally get this feeling...
So sad...
I dunno, this is very short but good and I don't know why I'm tearing up. Guess you showed me something I really hadn't noticed...
Anyway, as you can tell, I think this is a great poem and thanks for entering this into my contest. -
Heartbreaking, I think most of us can relate to this poem you've penned so beautifully.
I am looking forward to reading more of your work!
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Welcome to All Poetry !
This is a very beautiful piece so full of sad emotions. Your imagery in wonderful and you nearly had me in tears reading this. Thanks so much for sharing
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Gaylene
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beautiful, yet so sad...one shouldn't have to beg for second chance..excellent poem, keep that pen running! ~blessings always~
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This is really great work, I can see talent runs in the family, keep it up and know we all feel this way, or felt this way at one time or another.
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you are my daughter
i knew you would do well at poetry keep up the writing and remember its just a hobby you need to become a vet so i get wealthy ha, ha
luv amilicious your mama
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