I remember the day when I fell apart
That was the day you took my heart
I told myself it was going to be okay
But the day when you left I cried whole day
Many say I'll forget about you
But they're wrong!!!
I know i'm just a child
And my feeelings aren't stable
But I know this is real
Because I never felt like this for anyone
Usually I wouldn't care about anyone
But you changed that
You came into my life...
You made the worst days my best
You made me laugh when all I wanted to do was cry
I knew at the begining that our love couldn't be for long
I knew it was just for a while
But I thought I would be able to let you go
But I'm not....
I'm not strong enough
You were usually my strenght
I just have a few parting words that must be said
"Even though you're far away"
"You'll always be close in my heart"
"Even though I can't see you everyday
"I'll think about you as soon as day starts"
"Even though I'll cry myself to sleep"
"I'll dream of you as I weep"
"Even though people say we'll get over it"
"You're the only one who can keep my spirit lit...."
Author notes
Long distance relationship
A contest entry
- The Form of Love by Perfectly Imperfect.
450 points, ended January 4, 2008, 31 entries
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Very nicely written. I enjoyed your view in honesty and you do well in making readers understand where you are coming from.
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sad. long distance relationships are hard. i really like it. and i can relate. i especially love the last stanza. it really helped pull the whole thing together.
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Aw, thats sad, but a good write. I loved it. Awsome Job!
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this was a really cool poem, i really liked it and i know where your coming from, because i used to be in a long distance relationshp too, and it can get really hard to deal with sometimes, but if you both love each other , than you can male it work. great job on this one
xo
kandy -
awe... that was really good. it seemed almost a little awkward at first when you switched from rhyme to free-verse, but it pulled together at the end. nice job, keep up the good work.
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I like it alot and I can relate to it too.
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I like it, can relate in a small way Well done and thank you for entering x
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