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Serenade

Like the first dawning
dew drops
Like the fresh scents
scents of morning
Like cut grasses in
spring time
Like a flower
in new bloom

Your beauty enfolds me
Engulfs and abounds me
Completely unveils me
Makes my heart cry for more

Like the depths of your
valleys
Like the gushing of

geizas
Like the turn of the

ocean

Trickling streams

down the mountains

Like the mists upon

Snowdon

Gently rise

Gently fall

 

Guess not often

I tell you

Just how much

you mean to me

That my life

would be worthless

Without you to adore

 

Yes, I'm saying

I love you

And I hope you

are listening

For it seems like

a lifetime

To speak out

surface and soar

 

Like the eagle

flies on wing

Like the clouds

In the Heavens

Like trees

rustle above

My life trembles

with passion

Let me show

my adoration

My courtship and

fondness 

My sweetest armour


Author notes

Based on prompt 6 - Annies song - John Denver

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  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    Congratulations on all the Shiny Trophys!

    First of all, I'd like to say this is an awesome poem, thank you for sharing your muse with us. And WOW - I don't know how I missed reading this before, it is outstanding!! Niaish for making my day!!! Peace, Yellow Moon, aka Cyn


  • fantasysmurf
    September 3, 2008

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    Appreciating the beauty

    Appreciation for life and its beauty takes a powerful writer to humbleness. The grandness and richness you gave the surroundings in your "Serenade" make for good reading. I have listened to this serene song and wish for every reader to hear it too.

  • SoulWhispher
    August 13, 2008

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    This was a truly amazing poem, I really enjoyed the flow and the rthym, you painted a picture in the mind of the reader, great job, blessings John

  • midnightblue1272
    May 27, 2008
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    Pretty

    What pretty words there are. You got a real talent, Anna-Marie. Fine work.


  • Three Doves
    March 7, 2008

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    Good Prompt Choice

    great write prompted by a great song you expressed yourself well and many share in your emotion. Niaish for sharing your gift. Peace in light and love. Best wishes in life. Congrats on the awards


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 5, 2008

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    Not to fond of repetiton in poetry but you did this very well congrats on all of the trophys niaish for sharing


  • Bluebook Pet
    March 4, 2008

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    I love that song (Annie's Song) I rarely hear it now in the radio, always the instrumental version.

    You quite have a lot of similes here Madame.


  • Sunshine Always
    February 29, 2008

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    Being a Big John Denver fan I find this a truly lovely write and a real credit to the song it is based upon. Words intermingle with feelings to create a warm and delicate piece... Faarrr out...Sunshine...


  • Quiet places
    February 25, 2008

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    Outstanding!!

    What a beautiful tribute to a special person! Such romance in your well chosen words of love and respect. Warms the heart! Love it, Don


  • tawk gold member
    February 24, 2008

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    What a beautiful take on the prompt. I used to listen to John Denver years ago I miss him to this day. Amazing imagery and emotion within. I so enjoyed reading. Niaish for sharing


  • Sandygram silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    Good morning. You have penned a beautiful poem from a beautiful song. I love "Annie's Song" It fills up my senses. This was a pleasure to read this morning. You take care, Sandy


  • MysticalRayne
    February 23, 2008
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    Congrats on your trophies - truly and enjoyable read

  • PureCountry
    February 23, 2008

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    Annie's Song

    now that tugs at the strings of time. As I look back through the pages of yesteryear, and ponder your words, I find them worthy of such a beautiful song.

    Unfortunate John and the one who inspired the song, parted in true life. May you and your love know nothing but happier times for an eternity.

    Niaish for sharing, and Well Written!!!!!!!!


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    February 23, 2008

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    This is a beautiful serenade, I was never serenaded before. I see this poem has been in many contests. Congrats on your trophies.


  • LittleMoon silver member
    February 22, 2008

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    I usually have some trouble with understanding some styles of writing and I have no idea at all of the technical side of poetry but I really like this. This is lovely, well done from not too far away on the Black Mountain.


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    Amazing!
    A beauteous combination of imagery and emotion!
    Perfection.
    This was done so well, great job!


    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~


  • Shadoe
    February 22, 2008

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    Wonderfully done from the prompt! Not only does it wrap you up in the visual aspects that you offer but the emotional side of the heart as well.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    February 22, 2008

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    SMILES

    You do amaze me my sister*hug* the beauty flowing from your pen to our hearts...wow!

    it flows like magic and sings softly to the soul...niaish for sharing your Master piece with me*hug*


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    An Imagery packed poem full of beautiful phrases and deeply rooted in a love that honors and respects. Your illusion to nature images enhance this thoughtful piece. Well Done!

    Gray Elk


  • Emile
    February 22, 2008

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    Good

    This is a great poem and I felt the emotions swimming throughout it. The author uses good imagery and maintains a poetic flow through the whole piece. The poem has a message of love and delivers it well Nice flow of words and a consistent sounding poem.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    December 17, 2007

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    Upon reading it again, I see what you are saying , thank you for clearing things up for me, I do appreciate that

    Good Luck




  • katie-jo
    December 16, 2007

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    Interesting poem.

    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.


    Merry Christmas!
    ~katiebird


  • Melissa Burns
    December 9, 2007

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    "shameless trick" However, very nice poem with a very pleasing flow when you read it. Good luck!


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    you write of love so beautiful... it must be inspired by the landscape in which you live ,, good luck peter xx


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    December 7, 2007

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    this is so beautifully written, each line flowing to the next easily. well done and best of luck sissy


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    December 7, 2007
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    BREATH TAKING

    each line flows into the other and love finds a seat that is comfortable...just beautiful and a winner for sure


  • Arizona Sunset
    December 7, 2007

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    beautiful take on the prompt, and one of my favorite singers I really love what you did with your poem. best to you in the contest ~blessings always~


  • Passionate Phoenix
    December 7, 2007

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    beautiful tribute. this is defenatly a piece to be proud of, nicely done. some lovely images and perfect wording. good luck x


  • W a s p
    December 7, 2007

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    "you...

    fill up my senses..." Very pleasing, you captured it very well, always was a good song. If Mr. Denver were to read this he would be impressed...ian.

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