Love is my poison,
it brings only pain.
Love is my substainance,
it pierces my soul.
Longing for your sweet kisses,
your silky slicing words.
My cracked and bleeding lips
long for your tender touch.
Beloved, heal me.
A contest entry
- parched lips by adsaige.
300 points, ended January 13, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes.......But it has to have emotion by Nikki Rowles.
450 points, ended March 17, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very good....can so feel your longing here, it's an amazing poem, and I can so relate....major kudos
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WOW!
I loved this. I can relate, and I see where you're coming from. To me it shows that love can hurt, and it can suck, but it is addicting. And once you're in it, you can't get out. It can overpower you. I love how you showed that and such a short but powerful poem.
Caitlin. -
I like this, simple yet powerfully penned.
your silky slicing words.
very creative descriptions, fabtastic
Good luck in your contest
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This is nicely penned. I enjoy the way you keep it short to the point and yet use strong enough wording to allow us to understand the heart break and longing. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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