with eyes raised,
like perfect pearls
to rage of sea
her currents scrub
white sand
and seashells
offer no words to comfort
there is no path
or refuge
and I-
like driftwood,
must swim
through life’s
blues,
for survival.
A contest entry
- through the blue door by Cat.
700 points, ended December 12, 2007, 23 entries
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i have used driftwood a couple times
in my writes- it is such a force to be reckoned with..
soft, porous, susceptible and yet.. surprisingly resilient- and when
it dries.. beautiful
very nicely done this poem.. glad to find you here.
m -
I'm helping Mary witht the judging - and now I got to read the poems that I've missed somehow.
This is lovely - it has a universal ring to it - so many can associate with the process of trying to stay afloat in life's blue seas. Nice weave of nature and human emotion here. Well done.
~ Nicolette
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lovely lines... an adept interpretation of blue and a strong and accurate metaphor for life, a life that could belong to anyone...
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again another beautiful poem of nature, thank you for sharing and good luck in the contests,mm
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Al this is really great. The soft intonation of words makes one drift even as a wood.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
VIRGOAN
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well done hun as you metaphocally decsribed lifes trials and tribulations in lone wonders to survival. I have been feeling these emotions in theis write alot lately and when I read this it brought tears to my soul. well done and many blessings always xxxxxx
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I lvoe the feel of the driftwood's toss and tumble, but ever surging to some shore. well done, my friend... beautifully so.
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I just love these color prompt contests, how so many people can take the color blue, and bring it to life- so beautifully too.
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Beautiful metaphor!! I really love the ending - perfect finishing! Beautiful work again!!
~Namita
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Interesting metaphor, similie used in these lines, liked the flow, brevity of the lines and the interpretation of the theme of this contest.
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Ahh. This is good. I do like this very much.
~Pamela 
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