tentative, lingering
in the open air
above the crowded streets
like the stars you want
but never can reach
the horizon always
where sky meets earth
shrouded in mist
an illusionary oasis
beckoning ever closer
search for miles
across time and tell
but one step ahead
is the evasive mind
Author notes
i chose evasive... cause it's pretty awesome. and the title, evased me... that's wht it's not called Evasive...
A contest entry
- The Word by Celticjedi.
600 points, ended December 23, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
well give it to me straight
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haha i love this! "like the stars you want
but never can reach" i've always wanted to reach the stars..since i was a little girl..aww..your bringing back childhood memories haha! its really good
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I love it, very well written. Keep that pen at work.
Silvos.
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Sis you really are a genius. I love this a lot, the poem as well as the word both fit you very well. Thanks for entering my contest, stay smart and creative!
Loves,
Cj
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Yo. Don't see the evasive-ness in the poem, until you pointed it out in the bottom.
But otherwise I do rather like, feel the experimentation of the lines. With the oasssis and the horiiizon and the crowded streeeets. Beautiful.
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yeah this one is mostly just for fun.
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