Sun shimmers
inviting shadow,
long cool pleasure pull
trips tight
in cover paint
from
belligerent teens.
Awkward caress
remembers the scape and spin
and dark climb
and still
curiosity lingers.
Copyright © 2007
Pamela A. Lamppa
(All Rights Reserved)
A contest entry
- through the blue door by Cat.
700 points, ended December 12, 2007, 23 entries
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I like the way
this suggest thoughts without having said them , leaves one to ponder the words and their implications a bit deeper. good write
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i really like the feel of this piece- the soft alliteration the pleasant scene painted- i tripped up a bit on the second stanza-
i think it needs another transitional word to make it read a bit smoother?
but i do love the images here..
very nice
m -
I'm helping Mary with the judging - and it looks like it's going to be a tough one!
I liked what you did here... very nice brevity and still you managed to let the "curiosity lingers"...and I like that about a poem. Nice take on the contest theme.
~ Nicolette
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Nicely done P, the interesting part is that the mystery remains Love, C
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and the mystery remains unopened.
well done my friend!
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two thumbs up!...
... and a snap! you r amazing my friend!
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