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What Have I Become

What have I become?
I use to be that little girl,
Who smiled in every photograph,
But that smile is rarely there anymore,
As I look at the person I become,
And well I am not proud of,
The girl well woman now,
Who almost everyday wears a line of no emotion,
As anger constantly build with each day,
And tears cried no one else would see,
Is that really me?
Why am I like this?
Feeling empty like nothing inside?
Taking the heavy blows life throws my way,
Loved by wonderful people,
But still I feel the same.
Is something wrong with me?
Am I the new scrooge?

I had my heart broken,

Healed then broken agian,

How much more can I take?

Until I never give my heart away?

I admit I had my share of hurting people,

But in the end I felt so bad,

And really didn't mean too.

I look back at myself,

And try to figure out why I became this way.

God, whoever?

If you got the answers,

Please send them my way,

So may be I could just smile again.

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  • okwriter94
    November 19
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    you are a very talented writer.


  • Meme Wheeler
    November 3
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    This is very candid. I have felt this way too. You have captured this questionable emotion very well.


  • Jordan Martin
    October 22

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    I love your poetry so much!! You are officially one of my favorite poets! And that's a hard list to get on because I'm so super picky! But you are definitely list worthy!!

  • oh my gosh
    September 17
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    I didn't like that poem.


    • lesbian-in-love
      September 18
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      Why? It speaks the truth which apparently some people don't seem to handle to well. So if you don't like my poems that don't read them that simple!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

      • oh my gosh
        September 18
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        It's just my opinion..

        Chill..

        • lesbian-in-love
          September 18
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          Chill? You don't go putting something like that under someone elses poem. If you don't like my fucking poems don't read it that's all I got to say to you! I am tired of fucking people putting shit or saying shit. It's your opinion yeah but still don't need to say something like that!

          • oh my gosh
            September 18
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            I'm just letting you know, that it sucks.

            • lesbian-in-love
              September 18
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              Yeah and do you have any poems on here? this site is to help you grow as a writer not by putting people down by saying it sucks!

              • oh my gosh
                September 23
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                I'm just saying my opinion. I thought we had freedom of speech douche bag.


  • AllOverItNow
    September 13
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    Very interesting, introspective. Nicely penned.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    April 29, 2008

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    aww this is the bestest I like this one u can really write poetry baby keep it up and I am soo excited and don't forget to call me when u get home


  • XxTattered WingsxX
    April 18, 2008

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    I think that the title was quite captivating. It shows exactly what you have become but who you wish to be again. Yes, there is only so much heartbreak a person can take before the numbness sinks in. Yet, a broken heart will always heal as long as you don't force yourself to reopen the wound. As long as you have one person who can make you smile at least once a day, then you have something that a lot of people would kill for. Just keep your head held high and know that things could only go uphill from here.


  • brokenxchinadoll
    February 13, 2008
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    aw thats really good the last stanza was my favorite


  • Janetheplain
    January 11, 2008

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    Aw!

    This is so heart wrenching! I can relate to this though. Sooo sad
    Well done! Jane.

    Fave lines: Why am I like this?
    Feeling empty like nothing inside?
    Taking the heavy blows life throws my way,

    God, whoever?
    If you got the answers,
    Please send them my way,
    So may be I could just smile again.




  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    I saw this title and I had to read it....Partly because I have one of the same title, and I must say that I am glad that I was able to read this.

    I see a very open poem here very real and honest. Excellent job with it.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • Addict 17
    December 17, 2007
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    aw i hope your better loved the poem <3


  • Amera gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    This poem really hurts and pulls at my heart strings. Nothing is wrong with you. You let people around you pull you down. I hope this poem isn't real and it's just fiction but if it is real. Please remember you are still that little girl and you just have to let her out and fuck everyone else. (excuse my lauguage) People love you and this is a great poem.

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • lesbian-in-love
      December 14, 2007

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      Thanks for the comment. I know nothing is wrong with me just was in one of my moods. I do have a temper on me so this is my way of getting my anger out instead of beating up someone or something like that. I am glad you liked it though.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    December 11, 2007

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    Sitting here with tears in my eyes and a deep understanding ...Your words pull the need to hug you close and tell you that I do understand Thank you kind soul for sharing your life with me and I ma honored to meet you


  • Borntowriteforever
    December 10, 2007

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    This is poem is one that I can feel deeply related to. Who you are is what you make of yourself and who you want to be. great write


  • genevieve3
    December 9, 2007
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    look up, let go, live the dream
    why no longer matters

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