The butterfly smiles
Upon the dew-painted sunflower
Its time is at hand
And it doesn't realize
Master Fate is calling
A little boy beams
At the butterfly he catches
And puts in his collection
Of bugs pressed with skill
Master Fate is calling
The little boy frowns
At school he is bullied
People are mean to him
And he has no friends
Master Fate is calling
Pressing his nose
Against the bus window
He sniffs softly
As he sits all alone. Again.
Master Fate is calling
The boy grows up
Into a teenager
Still friendless
He holds much hatred
Master Fate is calling
One day he is bullied
Far too far
He leaves the school
Runs home with tear-filled eyes
Master Fate is calling
He enters his home
Slams open the cabinet
Pulls out a pistol
That his dad gave him for Christmas
Master Fate is calling
Closes his bedroom door
Weapon in hand
He goes to his bed and sits
Gun ready to do its work
Master Fate is calling
Barrel in mouth
Eyes streaming tears
On his face gathers rivers
Caused by years gone by
Master Fate is calling
Finger on trigger
Eyes clenched tight
Open again for a moment
To take in the last vision
Master Fate is calling
A loud sound now
Echoes through the room
As the weapon is dropped
The boy stands unsteadily
Master Fate is calling
He plods to the desk
Throws off posters and papers
Out he pulls a wooden box
Filled with butterfly specimens
Master Fate is calling
He hugs it tight as his only friend
Holding him alive because he happened to see
One corner, one butterfly
Sticking out for his final vision
Master Fate is calling
A contest entry
- Invite Only by Starz of Heaven.
550 points, ended December 6, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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speechless, not really but you get it. The meaning behind it is so deep. I honestly thought the boy would do it. It is such a beautiful piece, adding it as one of my favorites.
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Loved the metaphors and imagery.
Not crazy about the repetition [I'm so picky about repetition]. Besides that, this was well done. Golden for sure.
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Breathtaking... The emotions expressed in great choice of words leaves me speechless.. This is such a powerful write and the imagination in this piece is astounding.. Very intense and eloquent images potrayed and I am awed by the creativity of the words combined in this poem...
This poem truly deserves its gold. Superb writing.. (:
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Aww. Great poem. ( =
I loved it. Very sad.
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WOW i really liked that....so sad and happy in the end
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I loved it
I like to be taken on rides. Your visuals and flow were great. I don't know what else to say but that I loved your poem and will read more.
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wow way to go with this beautiful write
i like this poem alot cause the butterfly the boy caught for his collection is actually the same thing that helped him out a bit with the suicide. its so depressing on how kids get bullied everyday about something but so amazing on what some people may think stupid can save a life. every1 needs friends and some find them in weird ways. congrats with the gold u deserve it. beautiful
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Wow! That was emotional, I've actually welled up here! That was a wonderful write! The descriptions and imagery here are wonderful, I especially love this,
Upon the dew-painted sunflower
Congrats on gold!
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this was amazing! it was so sad, and i'm so happy that the little boy lived. it truly represents how important friendship is to a full life! wonderful write! i love it!
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Man, this is so depressing. I'm glad this ends in a positive note. Everyone needs a friend, and needs to know that there is always another way out. This is good though.
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very very awesome write here... I love this one... Seriously this poem made me feel sad for the little boy...
I loved this. Keep writing!
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Wow this is wonderful ! is it at all inspired by the movie of the same name? grea\t write
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Nope. I just thought the name worked well. Thanks for commenting.
~Asa of the Poets of Cascading
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Holy freaking crap...this is so sad
Yet hopeful, its sad that so many children do live like this, bullied and rejected for reasons unknown to them. You've penned wonders for the prompt she gave. I love this. Congrats on the gold it was definitely well deserved!!!
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Oh Sigh I was not expecting this it is very good I like it alot.You have done wonderful with this prompt,On Section 7 line 4 should it be dad not dead But other then that it is perfect yes
Much love CJ.
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