Exhilaration courses through my centre
Surges of explosive power rise
Fractured delusions peel away
While
Clarity wipes perception clean
All the love I feel for you
Has opened like a lotus
Expanded
Embraces each living soul
One
At last
With all
I am blinding light
Lover I surround you
Am you
Be at peace
For it is more than we imagined
Infinity is belonging
Is truth
Not only journeys end
But beginnings
Full circle
I have come
Am a splurging fountain
Of living water
Feel my eternal touch
Know my utter happiness
Accept my guidance
Until you arrive
Author notes
This was written for a contest and in it I've died and am saying a few last words to a loved one.
A contest entry
- Death... Your final words after the fact by BluesMan.
800 points, ended January 15, 2008, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is wonderful.
I think that we all have to face that reality one day. To leave behind something for the loved ones to read is helping them through bereavement. You did a fine job.
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Simply beautiful Your words painted a spiritual picture in my minds eye Brilliant Good luck in my contest
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pretty!! and since I'm commenting this on Christmas....Merry Christmas!!
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Your words make more sense telling the ones left behind how beautiful it is up there (though we may have trouble finding the words to describe what we see and feel) than to inform them that the beer is in the fridge and Mary needs to see a doctor because she is pregnant. Thank you for creating and sharing and good luck in the contest. Take care,
Chris
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Lol yes and that I forgot to pay the electric bill!
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"Not only journeys end
But beginnings
Full circle
I have come"
Ok so yeah. Wow. Lol but truly. This whole piece is amazing. I love how you've said you ARE certain things. Truly amazing!
And "Accept my guidance
Until you arrive", so inspirational. Best of luck in the contest!!
♥ Bandaid
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Beautiful
This is beautiful you have done a wonderful job with the promt and your words are words of comfort. wishing you all the best Brian.
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Fantastic!!
Good luck in the contest
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Heart-Stopping!
...damn it. I knew there'd probably be one extra-terrific-heart stopping poem, but somehow I hoped against it. lol, (I'm in the same contest as you) I must say that this piece is wonderfully refreshing. My favorite part was: Feel my eternal touch
Know my utter happiness
Accept my guidance
Until you arrive
Well, it's obvious that you're defininately going to get some prize, probably first. Although I was confused in the first stanza. Were you as a spirit, appearing and arriving to talk to your loved one? Anyway--great job again! I hope to read some more of your work soon.
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this is great, good on the prompt ,, lovely dying farewell ,,good luck xx
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Beautiful
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Yes. YEs. YES!
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